Reviews for the things that take you over
sylvia's syndrome chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
you've done a nice job of expressing emotion in this piece. i enjoyed this on the whole but i didn't like stanza six... it sounds very cliched to me. keep writing.
windy girl chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
'Spun around a thousand times,

turned around, and now you're blind.'

I love the way that sounds.

lymli chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
Shattered parts of you,

I'd cut myself to help you heal.

Let love take over your life.

it's a great stanza, and great poem by the way, the idea of giving everything for someone you care is good.