|Reviews for the things that take you over|
| sylvia's syndrome chapter 1 . 7/5/2008
you've done a nice job of expressing emotion in this piece. i enjoyed this on the whole but i didn't like stanza six... it sounds very cliched to me. keep writing.
| windy girl chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
'Spun around a thousand times,
turned around, and now you're blind.'
I love the way that sounds.
| lymli chapter 1 . 7/4/2008
Shattered parts of you,
I'd cut myself to help you heal.
Let love take over your life.
it's a great stanza, and great poem by the way, the idea of giving everything for someone you care is good.