Hmm... very abstract, to me at least, I'm sorry, its just that I can't find the hidden meanings of poems that well. It seemed relaxing in the beginning, and toward the end it tramsformed into a small swirl of emotion, you had a pretty good transition in the middle as well, so thats a plus.

What I can deduce from the end is that the couple is having some problems, but one of the couple wants them to stay together, but the other wonders if the other's feelings are true. I hope its close. It was a nice read either way.

Keep up the good writing!

-Durandel

i like the last line of this piece. i would have liked the language to be more abstract or poetic; this didn't really read like a poem. more like an interesting paragraph in poem form. keep writing.