*Crowd woops and hollers hysterically* That was one of the best short fiction stories I've read in a long time. I scream for a sequal! More Finn and Samuel! Oh, and I'd also like to point out that your editing skills are exceptional, no mistakes that I caught! I'll be looking forward to more of your stories!

Sincerely, Leeland88

Wa-hoo Tom! Way to be a man! *sobs* Why can't all guys be like him? Why?

Hmm... I'm trying to figure out who these guys are... cupids maybe...? I guess I'll find out. :)

Woah. Omg. The ending was SO unexpected (That is, the first chapter). I'm really liking this.

I really liked this story as a whole. Yes, there were some iffy parts here and there but other than that it was great! And yet again I have another analysis don’t worry this one is much shorter lol! and hopefully more correct ) On the way back Ellen was contemplating about the whole night. She may have been trying to ignore him to gain his attention or she just may have not had words to say. However, doubt starts to creep in on Tom. He fears for his friendship but knows that what he did was morally right. His only current comfort is that his conscious wont kill him for what he had done. He knew his limits and the fact that he would not push them showed that he was truly a stronger person for a weaker person would have caved. Ellen decides to take a different approach. She may have a new found respect for him and come to understand why he did what he did so she decides that dating and perhaps taking things slow would be better. Nice ending for them ) Finn is naïve and doesn’t quite understand why he didn’t kiss her but he blows it to the side. Samuel on the other hand isn’t to happy, though there was a chance that Tom would not kiss Ellen it was unlikely. Samuel comes to the knowledge that Tom is not like most other sex driven males. Samuel had probably hoped that that it would not stop with an innocent kiss but, he truly underestimated Tom who knows what was morally right and what was wrong. He knew his limitations and would not risk friendship. Well done! Even if a penguin eats your tuna you still shouldn’t harm it… penguins are cool P Great Story I liked it. Well done D I am glade that I have inspired you!

I liked this chapter I can’t believe that this story is almost over! Wow but I do have a good bit to say about the chapter though in my little analysis. I’ll start from the beginning of the chapter. Ellen becomes quiet and withdrawn after the lights go out tom feels that it is because of the lights but its not. She becomes quiet to try to gain his attention. She feels rejected by him because she threw herself at him with full force but he denied that he wanted her. The lights going out gave her time to fully take in the loss so to gain his attention she becomes quiet so he will pity her and try to do what he can to comfort her. Tom on the other hand knows that he screwed up and blames it on the lights going out because then it’s not “his fault” and ultimately gives him some sort of power. He realizes she is depressed but doesn’t realize that she is trying to obtain his attention so he tries to make himself seem more impressive by obtaining control of the situation. He gets some light hoping it will comfort the situation but it doesn’t. He tries to cheer her up by offering her the chance to go to his room. She becomes passive in hopes to gain more of his attention and pity. Tom doesn’t realize this so he goes to his room to get more light. Ellen follows him because she realizes that being depressed/quiet/not herself is not getting his attention. She asks him about his family knowing that he likes conversation. Tom is quite happy to share in hopes that it will lighten the mood. Ellen breaks down crying and sits on his bed her intentions are obvious at this point of time. She feels that sleeping with him will get her the attention she wants. She hopes to manipulate Tom into sleeping with her by making him pity her or perhaps give him the opportunity to take advantage of her in a fragile state of mind which is something most males would be more than happy to do but this is Tom. She tells Tom about how her parents favor her sister. She feels that if she cannot obtain love from them she might as well get it from Tom. Tom is smart and relays to her that it is hard to change but if he knew a bit more psychology it would be easier to explain. There is human nature, which is what decides what is good and what is wrong and decides between the two. There is what some call carnal nature which is the “evil” nature which is self-gratification centered. It cares not for others only lustful desires then there is what some call spiritual nature, which cares about others and seeks to do what is morally and ethically right. Both influence human nature it’s just that one must chose which to do. Anyway back to the analysis. She throws herself at him yet again asking for a kiss but expecting much more. She knows she is in a compromising position on top of him and she knows that a kiss will not be enough but if she can start him off with a kiss it can keep going with lust taking over and moral thought and reasoning will be diminished. Tom for a long moment is tempted by carnal nature but he made a promise to be there for her. He knows that it will not stop at an innocent kiss and that if he were to continue it would ruin everything. His morals win out in the end and he does what is ethically right; it’s not what he wants and it’s not what she wants (mostly because she has been planning this from the beginning) but it is right. That and Tom discovers the true meaning of love. Love is not self-gratification. Love is sacrifice. Tom risked everything when he told Ellen no. He also gave up on lustful desires to ensure her purity as well as not to do something to ruin everything. Well done! I enjoyed reading this chapter. It gave me a lot to analyze. Can’t wait for the next chapter. It should be very interesting. Yet again good job! Very enjoyable!

Hmm I liked it, as always. But I am sorta confused...I see that he "wanted" her, but what's wrong with just a kiss? A kiss would just be a kiss, nothing more. I still liked it though, and I'm really curious as to those two guys from the last chapter.

Bravo!

~Brezzia

Poor Tom… life for him just sucks. Anywhoo my thoughts on this chapter. Samuel is rather cocky and likes to break the rules if he knows he can get away with it. He is determined to get his way and makes sure he has something to back it up. The characteristics you give this character is constantly reinforced. I like that good job. Finn is nothing like Samuel he likes to keep things safe and thinks ahead. He doesn’t do the normal impulse thing most guys do he likes to think thing through. However, he is the type to be easily persuaded and doesn’t stick with what he thinks is right. Overall Samuel is a butt-whole and Finn is too shy to stand up to him. Well Done! I enjoyed reading this chapter! ‘Twas awesomeness! Love it!

WOW!

I am extremely curious to see where this goes!

Brilliant work, and my only criticism is to wish it was longer!

Good job :)

~Brezzia

Oh my! Quite the cliffhanger ending..how cruel!

I really enjoyed it. At first I imagined it as a sort of...a predictable romance drama. But yours has a different feel to it that kept me interested :)

Good job Mister Frodo! I'm a fan already, and I'm looking forward to the next few chapters.

~Brezzia

I do have to say that I was laughing for a good bit of this chapter. Poor Tom he was trying so hard to win her affections and yet she already knew. He did the typical male behavior. He tried to think his way logically when females are all emotional or at least most are. He is shy and very timid while she is very outgoing. If he isn’t careful she could use him or well I guess you could call it manipulate. She has power in the relationship and she knows that unfortunately he’s too concerned with not looking like an idiot to realize that she is throwing herself at him. Anywhoo this was written Very well. It had great description and good dialog. You also added a bit of physiology, which I personally find impressive and a bit easier to analyze the characters. I enjoyed reading it and I am looking forward to the next chapter. Keep writing this is awesome that and I love how he is trying so hard but he keeps falling to ill luck. After reading all of the wonderful I love you and I’m depressed poems I’m truly looking forward to something other than that.