This was a great story. It has a bittersweet ending. I love bittersweet endings!

Great story!

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Rosie Thinks: 'With The Band' is a story that is both fun and heartbreaking. It's the whole 'famous guy, non-famous girl' cliche, but I really like how they have history before he became famous. The story is in different perspectives, but mainly Bianca's and Graham's. I like how KatieTheWriter's written Graham's POV as it is very realistic and makes you understand the way his mind works. Bianca is a loveable character and all her various daydreams at the beginning are hilarious and add to her character. Sometimes, when the POV danced around, it got a bit confusing as to who's head we were in. I'd advise completely separating them to make it easier to understand. It was very well-written although some parts towards the end could have been more drawn out, as they were all summarised. There were little mistakes with the spelling/grammar/punctuation except for mixing up 'apart' and 'a part' - there's a pretty big difference between the two! However, she more than makes up for those little mistakes with how emotive her writing is, whether the scene be happy or sad. It was a lovely take on a well-known cliche with a few unexpected and original twists.

Wow, I really cried at the end :(

Amazing. I can't say anything else. Just heart warming.

aw~ Thanks for this story! :D

Wow that was so good! I'm going to be totally honest, I cried so many times reading this. I felt the hurt and the love at the beginning, because my first love is a musician, and damn do I miss him. Last I hear, he's in a new band and they played in front of three big record labels the other weekend, and although it's been over a year since we were together, I hope he doesn't go the route the characters here do, whether he's signed or not, because the last thing I want is for him to end up like Frankie. The whole story was so fun and heartbreaking, definitely a favorite, but I'm scared to read it again XD

Good start!

loved it! thank you!

Awhs. I read this story tonight and loved it. Poor Frankie. :s

Aw, poor Frankie :( This is an awesome story, it has an awesome plot, really cool characters, and a perfect mix of sorrow and love and happiness... Keep writing!

- Christina

Aw I love this story!

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First of all this story is highly unique and goes through a whirlwind of events as well emotions. i found while the idea certainly grab attention, it is very sloppy written and poorly organized. At certain points it seemed like you just rambled and didn't know where to take your story. The led to killing a character. While a death is interesting it's entirel out of left field. It's painful to read this story as you are jumping from one point to another with out actually haven't transition. Moving on to the characters while protaining realism but aren't thoroughly developed yet. This story has many good qualities but i think you should really consider planning and figure out exactly where you want the story to go. This draft would be an excellent time to go back and revise. Fine tune and pick through it with a fine tooth comb. If you are incompetent and can't accomplish such a task, FP has provided you with BETAs or get an editor. I enjoyed your story but it is still very rough and i advise you to go and do the right thing...fix it or get help.

Sincerely,

a very concerned reader

This story was cute up until sometime around the point where Graham & Bianca started having issues, or a little after that. I don't know. You summarized a lot when it probably should have been written out, and the pressure that Graham was feeling and the problems that they were having in their relationship weren't explained very well. I think basically from the point where Graham & Bianca made up and got back together after he found out that she was pregnant, the story lost it's steam and sense of plot/direction. Maybe because it was summarized, with random scenes played out, but it seemed a little dragged out and unnecessary after they got back together. Maybe it's because after that, the story was more about Hallie & Frankie instead, and Frankie's character was always kind of... eh. Nothing really appealing about him, he just seemed like he was there to nag on Graham or something and tempt him into things that Graham shouldn't have done. Hallie didn't even really seem like much of a friend to Bianca either - she was always just there for her gain. In the beginning, it really did seem like the only reason why she was with Frankie was because of his fame - it was all she could talk about when thinking of him.

I meant to read some of your other stories earlier, but I just finished my first week back in college and I realized how easy it is to just stop reading with all the other work that college piles on. I liked the summary tone in your other story because it seemed to work with the plot, but I think in this case, it more hindered the story than helped it. I also didn't like how in the beginning Bianca so easily ran back into Graham's arms. I know that she missed him but he was the one to dump her, and he never really explained that, never really said why she wasn't getting in the way of his work later when she had been before, never even really apologized for hurting her like that. I would have thought there would have been more animosity felt from her.

I don't know. Overall this story was okay. The Graham & Bianca coupling was cute, and I was glad to see they worked it out.

- Alyssa

hiya

great story. I love how you've gone through the years till they are watching their son playing in a band. Its a nice touch. I also like how you added in the information of to what happened to their marriage and the cancer etc.

Well done

Angel