Reviews for Beaten
J.N. Lloyd chapter 1 . 7/11/2008
Ugh, I hate relationships like this! That's when you just beat the other person mindlessly, whether it be with fists or intellect. Unfortunately, many men and women linger in abusive relationships for fear of leaving. You portrayed that well, and the imagery was draped in a cloak of realism. I like your style, keep writing, you'll only do better from here!
Landcaster chapter 1 . 7/11/2008
Very vivid and emotional. Elegantly blunt and simple as well. I loved the line, "And you gave me a glare of/ Disgust/ As if I was an insect/ In its dying phase." Sounds almost like slam poetry, especially towards the end, and the final stanza is a perfect closer. You have good structure to your poems. Maybe add italics and bold for added clout.