Reviews for I Hate Feather Pillows
deefective chapter 2 . 7/31/2008
Haha, Adrian makes me laugh. And Kian seems like a jerk but a well-meaning one. Nicely written chapter, only that you seemed to have made one mistake. The bald guy said Kian's name when they entered the room.

""Kian?" The balding guy with an ugly mustashe and suit asks."

And then after Adrian asked him his name.

""Um...what's your name?" I ask."

I think he would have heard the guy. But oh well. Other than that, good stuff.
Jayn chapter 35 . 7/27/2008
I HATE the father. Can I attack him? I'll only kill him a little bit. *Sigh* Fine. It’s life in prison without parole then. *Curses the rapist out*

Anyway, I like your story a lot! The end was a little abrupt. There was no transition between Adrian living and his father being convicted. I'm glad that Adrian lived! Yet I did not really understand why Leo became the bad guy- that was not really explained. This story has a lot of potential! It seemed to be planned out in the beginning then became a bit choppy towards the end. So if you do decide to editing, focus on developing the second half of the story. You could send a strong message with this story. Chapter 23 was especially well written! Maybe you could bring that up again to enhance Adrian's actions! Also, you might want to talk about how Adrian went from 'I need to send a message without hurting my family' to 'lets put him in jail'.

I hope I did not criticize too much. I know that even when reviewers are trying to be helpful; it can be disappointing to hear everything wrong about a story. So, you should try focus on the good stuff! _

Jayn
Miss.Me So HAHA chapter 35 . 7/26/2008
Wow quick ending, no?

I loved all of. :D
crystal balle chapter 35 . 7/26/2008
What? It's over? No! I loved every word of it, but it's really upsetting that it's done. D8 That was a really dramatic ending. And I like how the epilogue was in Erik's point of view.
cobraqueen17 chapter 35 . 7/26/2008
Not a slacker just busy so ha. That was a quick and abrupt ending but happy so all is well.
Miss.Me So HAHA chapter 34 . 7/26/2008
New Reader. :]

AND HE LIVES.

:O
lalala chapter 34 . 7/24/2008
i love the relationship they are so cute

omg so he wants Kian but doesnt at the same time and by want i mean sexualy...
Esquirella chapter 34 . 7/24/2008
Phew! No ... onto the revenge!
Esquirella chapter 33 . 7/23/2008
After 33 chapters, that's a hell of a cliffie. What happens next?
cobraqueen17 chapter 33 . 7/22/2008
Not a slacker just have a lot of things to read and a story to write. So ha.
BvT chapter 33 . 7/22/2008
Yay new chapter!OMG! I wonder if he'll really be ok
cobraqueen17 chapter 32 . 7/22/2008
Kidnapping and a druging!
basshunterzzz chapter 32 . 7/21/2008
how could u leave it like dat? ur mean...

i was going to review every chappie..bt i got lazy...

luv ur baby..btw...kinda started a lil boring..bt picked up well...

au revoir from quebec!
koerle chapter 21 . 7/21/2008
I just read the first 21 chapters and I have to say I really like the story. The storyline in cute. And yourwriting style is very different, refreshing.

"He isn't perfect, which makes him perfect."

I love this line!

Kian is so cute!
BvT chapter 32 . 7/21/2008
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG! I really want to know to know what's wrong! Awsome chapter!
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