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nine planets chapter 1 . 7/13/2008
That was very deep I love the line : "To know when they're suppose to meet who where and why for what."

It just kind of gets me. I would try to break up some of the longer lines. The beauty of freestyle poetry is that lines don't have to be seperated by punctuation. Try seperating lines by ideas, or putting a certain word alone to emphasize it. Also, watch spelling with "route" and "'our' electric bills" and "supposed to." Excellent.