|Reviews for Everything I Never Wanted|
| Haydron chapter 2 . 4/16
There are a lot of commas being missed before ending speech marks. A minor thing really, but repeated enough, and I notice it. Also sometimes, a period is applied, and the next sentence doesn't begin with a capital letter.
Sorry this review was short, but I will keep reading! :D
| Haydron chapter 1 . 4/16
Your attention to detail is impressive. I was keeping a tally in my head. 2010...right. Born in 1993...right. Sixteen...okay. Few months to go till her 17th. I quickly surmised the only possible timeline this story could take place is, if it was set in January 2010. And lo and behold - mid-week January was mentioned! :D
I really enjoyed this first chapter.
Vampires have always taken a backseat to my preference for werewolves, but if I sit down and think about it, I've read a lot of vampire-related books and watched a lot of vampire-related media.
Luke was so rough, and Jerrick was an interesting mix of soft and rough. I'm trying to flesh out the female lead in my brain. She's "docile" but I have a feeling she's really smart and likes plotting. Otherwise I'd be disappointed :P
Interested in meeting Damien!
You've gone all "The Omen" on me :D
| ButterballPorkbun chapter 12 . 4/9
That is so sad is he going to send Daniel away or something like that away this story is wonderful please keep updating.
| lala chapter 11 . 1/18
Great story. Just a few things though, I know are, our, and or all sound alike but they are completely different words. I saw that a few times in your writing, with more than just those words. You should really either start editing, edit better, or ask someone to edit. Keep up the plot though
| Ellen chapter 11 . 1/17
I like Adrian best so far. It was obvious to me that Alexandra would be Damian's love interest, but I'm not sure what's Adrian's deal is. My current guess is that Alexandra died tragically, Casey is her reincarnation and is now regaining memories of her old life, and Adrian wants to take a mad grab for power (maybe even mutinying master and becoming master himself?). I'm worried about Casey learning her song in time, but more worried about the development with her being a reincarnation of Alexandra and how both she and Damien will handle it.
| Guest chapter 10 . 11/28/2014
Had to re-read this story . Just as enjoyable the second time around.
| Primi chapter 6 . 2/20/2014
| Primi chapter 1 . 2/18/2014
| ButterballPorkbun chapter 9 . 1/22/2013
Please update I absolutely love this story I really really want to now what happens next. I love your dark stories so please update
| Alaeryel chapter 9 . 1/13/2013
BRILLIANT-PLEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAASE SAY THERE WILL BE MORE!
| Alaeryel chapter 5 . 1/12/2013
| scorpioprincess chapter 9 . 10/16/2012
I really like this :) please update soon
| Tammy Rae chapter 9 . 8/3/2012
I really like this story. There is a lot of intrigue and the suspense keeps me reading. I'm very much looking forward to the next few chapters.
| a girl chapter 9 . 7/18/2012
This story has gotten better and better from the moment I started. I looked at the list of books you are currently writing and I feel this one should be a priority because I would love to see what happens next.
| E. N. Chance chapter 9 . 6/19/2012
It's official I love Adrian! We'll see in later chapters if Damian straightens up. I'm very curious as to how this dinner will go since the "slaves" compete XD