I think it was boring and too short. And it was rather boring. How did it get 83 comments though?

Very good, written in almost a humorous twisted way, which I like. I also thought the blood bit at the end was a nice touch.

Short and crisp. I like it.

OMG Short but attention-grabbing. So he was the one who killed this James, with a PENCIL?

Short, simple and to the point. Well done, nice insight into the mind of a killer i loved it, thank you.

Ooohhh, gave me the chills. Wish you made this longer though, it could work good as a story, a boy that everybody thought was good could be out to kill you...dun dun dun!

Old or not, this is really good despite the shortness. Simple and the way you built up the creepiness, real effective. Also some nice characterization...This guy's a psychotic boy for trying to imagine *sweat* when he already knew what the stuff was.

SEVENTY-SIX REVIEWS? XD Well this one was definitely successful. Although, I feel like the ending was supposed to be a surprise, but for me I guess it didn't work. Anyway, besides that, it was really well written. The grammar was flawless, which is nice. The shortness of it was very professional, and a good concept. It's the sort've a story that is scary because of the maturity of how it was written, as opposed to senseless gore. I was impressed by it. You did a great job!

I LOVED THIS. It was morbid and gruesome... It started out very innocent, but I loved how you slowly revealed the darker side to this one shot, dragging it on to make it more suspenseful and freaky. I love how Luther seemed to be reassuring himself that maybe killing James was a good idea. It's just very realistic for someone to do that. I can also see why Luther killed him. James didn't sound very nice... The last line was wonderful. It was just so abrupt and morbid, I loved it! Wonderful job!

wow! this is awesome dude!

i should really learn from you!XDD

and thanks for the comment on my first writing!X3

i'm gonna improve more!X3

Oh my. This kid is one creepy little psycho. LOL. Very interesting short story. Nice horror!

O_O Oh my my my my my. I did not see that coming.

The progression in this piece was so imaginative- I was hooked; I couldn't decipher Luther's sentiments towards James, and my opinion on the matter changed almost every sentence. I never would have anticipated the end!

Well done! :)

Ooh, I love this! Very good portrayal of character ) Nice work~

I really like this story.

Well written, excellent grammar and good suspense.

Great job! :D

Wah. That was *incredible.* I love stories with a sucker-punch ending like this. Excellent! :-) Thank you for posting.

~Emily

(P.S. - Reviews sometimes get you back-reviews. Thanks again! ;-D)