Reviews for CanisLupus |
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LM chapter 4 . 5/30/2012 It's ya begayu s lunoi not ya begraoo s luna. |
Yo-yo chapter 22 . 4/9/2012 How you manage to actually make me feel her transformation, I'll never know. You are an amazing writer. |
AubreeBlackbird chapter 28 . 3/24/2012 i loved it! ima start reading the second part right now! Mwah AubreeBee |
LostAuthor691 chapter 21 . 2/3/2012 Oh, nice chapter, i liked this one, could that last part be an early shift? really good im enjoying this story very much |
LostAuthor691 chapter 17 . 2/2/2012 I really like this story, i think aside from Elaine, Micheal might be my favorite character, the way you've described most of the werewolves on here they sound like they'd be at home in a supernatural episode of the Baki anime, or Fist of the North star, lol, love this story, really fun to read, i do wish Nathan would learn to listen to his sons though, i mean being a good commander might be about being able to keep order within the army units, BUT, being a good father means having that and being able to listen as well, dunno if i touched on that on an earlier review but meh, great story Canislupus, it's a really good story, i love it |
LostAuthor691 chapter 5 . 1/31/2012 Sean needs a metal baseball ball bat with silver nails sticken out of it up side the head, between the legs and in the darkest part of his body, man doesn't treat a lady like that and get away with it, i hope he gets what he deserves loving the story |
LostAuthor691 chapter 3 . 1/31/2012 Oh, i like where this one is going, i especially like the warrior motif you gave them too, like armor and swords and etc, now a days there aren't enough stories that portray werewolves like warriors, well not like you do, very good, very very good, i think i like Gabriel, normally im rooting for the main character, and in a way i am, but i can understand why he's furious, cuz even if she went in the opposite direction of the war, it could have squn around and spilled out into the streets any minute, very good story i'm liking it so far |
xxxreviewerxxx chapter 27 . 12/4/2011 Hi, I think you're story is awesome. It's completely action packed and I never would have guessed Nicolais wasn't in charge, but Mircea was. So that was an unexpected surprise. I also was extremely happy when I found that there was a completed sequel which I could plough through, (I've just started reading it). The only minor criticism I have, is that the story is meant to be set in the United Kingdom but has a lot of Americanisms in it. For instance you use Mom, instead of Mum. If we had breakfast in a place it would normally be a cafe. We generally don't have diners down here. There are some, for instance Eddie's Diner, but that doesn't really do breakfasts. Also most breakfasts consist of a 'fry up'. I'm sure you have the equivalent, two fried eggs, hash brown, bacon, sausage, beans and fried bread (yum)! So, I would change those. |
Werekid chapter 11 . 11/30/2011 In this chapter you jumped from first person to third and from past tense to present tense. Also at the end of the chapter, I saw you had written "up" instead of "you". Through out this story you have small typos, but as for the story, I love it. Very detailed, exiting, and I just can't stop myself from reading CanisLupus. All in all, this is a wonderful story. Thank you. |
Katie chapter 28 . 10/21/2011 Whenever I feel stressed or just want to read something that I know I absolutely love I re-read CanisLupus and Hell Hounds. I really want you to write the third one but for now I guess I'm content just imagining it on my own. |
ann chapter 28 . 8/30/2011 i love this story! |
Alicat05812 chapter 28 . 7/31/2011 Just want to say that I love this story. Can't wait to read the next part. |
Non.gracefulpenname chapter 28 . 7/9/2011 Personally, the story became more interesting when Elaine changed. Before that it felt like all the other chapter were just... Pointless. They weren't getting to the point, you know what I mean? Though, I can see the upside to those chapters... They helped create the character, but usually you can do that in only two and then build on further through the main plot. In some cases, your punctuation was a bit off- it was incorrect- and you had some typos- something most of us had. I wasn't sure as to what ages the males were, and only knew that some were old (Nathaniel etc). Sometimes it felt like she had a romance relationship with several of the characters... Which I think wasn't your intention. Other than that, this story was great... Just go fix everything that was mentioned above... And make the relationship between Michael and Elaine start from the beginning, just show a little of the potential. |
Lyn Harkeran chapter 1 . 3/2/2011 Oh! :D This is awesome writing! I can't wait to continue and read more! I love it so far. And I love the name Gabriel! *Blushes and Giggles* I know a very handsome man named Gabriel. Any-who automatic save and fav my dear. Deepest Regards, Lyn Harkeran. |
SxR Ninja chapter 1 . 12/28/2010 I like it. Very different way of werewolf thinking. I like when werewolves are born and not made. And the add the bonus of the female werewolf it's a good plot start. ] |