” and the hurt you’re over looking.”…overlooking

I like the beginning of this piece a lot, the future, past, present thing was really interesting and very true. It was a nice touch. The rest of the piece was nice as well, full of emotion and relateable, though a bit clichéd. I kinda wished there was more original ideas like the beginning. I guess I expected more after reading that. It’s still a good piece though.

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Anger that is so strong in this. I can understand this anger. People just don't get it sometimes that plans for the future don't work because they forget about what is happening in the here and now. I like the way that you have written this.

Keep it up.