|Reviews for Wings|
| Werdna73 chapter 6 . 6/4/2013
Very good. I like that each of your characters have distinct personalities, I can picture each of them easily. Most of your descriptions are on an outstanding level and clearly describe the scene.
| Werdna73 chapter 1 . 6/4/2013
Wow. This is amazing, very wonderfully written. You painted a vivid and living image o what was happening. There was a perfect mix of action, fear, and descriptions. This first chapter gives the same impression as those in the novels of Clive Cusseler, setting the scene for future actions.
| Aberrant Lycanthrope chapter 13 . 4/7/2009
Wow, not a totally unexpected turn of events, but strange nonetheless.
| Aberrant Lycanthrope chapter 12 . 12/9/2008
I'm reading! Don't stop! It is a little rough, but it is good writing, I would like to see that you have up your sleeves.
| Aberrant Lycanthrope chapter 8 . 12/9/2008
She is a spy now, this promising to get complicated.
| Jenny Rocker chapter 8 . 11/9/2008
Hey! I'm so glad to see an update!
Things appear to be getting more and more complicated...
Hope you continue to update. Can't wait to read more :)
| Aberrant Lycanthrope chapter 6 . 10/17/2008
Is there any particular reason this story hasn't seen any recent updates?
Looking forward to more
| Aberrant Lycanthrope chapter 1 . 10/12/2008
Nice start, beautiful use of imagery, and I love the character introduction
| Counting Petals chapter 6 . 9/13/2008
Review Marathon! (-points to link on profile-)
I keep meaning to finish this...I guess I will now )
I like the tension between Lena and Isaac/Katya, because it could make things very interesting between them.
I also like your descriptions because they're really bringing your world to life. I can visualize everything clearly, which is good. I also find the magical theory interesting.
| Jenny Rocker chapter 5 . 8/17/2008
Good chapter. You mentioned it was diffucult to write, and there are a couple places where I can feel that difficulty, but if you hadn't mentioned it, I probably wouldn't have noticed.
I loved this description of Isaac as he enters: "this one a slim young man with equally blond hair and classically good looks that were somewhat ruined by his scowling expression". It gives a perfect portrayal of Lena's first impression of him.
“I apologize if it looks chewed in places. I left it with the bags and Patu thought it was food.” -I adore Patu :)
There is one tiny phrase that seems a bit off to me: "She turned, placing her hands on her hips and cocking her head, reminding Lena very much of a curious owl regarding a mouse it didn’t feel like eating right just then"-I love the simile comparing Katya to an owl eyeing its prey, the only part that felt a little too casual to me was "right just then". Seems like you could say "right then" or "just then", but "right" & "just" seem almost like the same wording. I would pick one, not use both in the sentence.
Other than that, flawless. Hope you update soon :)
| Counting Petals chapter 2 . 8/17/2008
Review Marathon! (-points to link on profile-)
I like your descriptions of life in a border town. From just the few scenes we got here, I can picture what it's probably like. I also like how you're able to get us curious, because you've made it seem so effortless. You've just introduced a new character, but now I'm wondering what he has to do with the first chapter, and what's wrong with him.
| Counting Petals chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
Review Marathon! (There's a link on my profile if you're confused.)
I like this idea. You don't usually see planes in fantasy, so it's neat to see this sort of thing.
I also like the descriptions, because you gave us enough that we could picture things, but you didn't go completely overboard.
| Sarthim chapter 4 . 8/15/2008
All right! The next chapter was finally posted. Good as always...and that's all I have to say right now...
| Sarthim chapter 3 . 8/4/2008
Very good chapter, as always. The story flows fantastically, and I am already swept up in this world by the terrific descriptions and characters. Keep it going.
| Jenny Rocker chapter 3 . 8/2/2008
This is getting better and better, and well I just simply want to read more, so I hope you update soon.
Your characters are fantastic-although at this point I will admit, I like Patu best!: "“Don’t eat that. It’s not food.” Isaac nudged the creature’s head away before it could take a big bite. They were said to be able to eat practically anything, but he figured burnt bits of steel was pushing it. "
I love how you describe Isaac's fear of the plane, how he pictures it as a live creature-the broken glass is its teeth and it's going to eat him. Such a unique concept.
I just absolutely love this so far.
The only thing that was a little off was in chapter 2: "Then five little words turned his world upside down"-"Come home. There is a cure." is six words, which you even state in an earlier sentence. Despite that very tiny inconsistency, Just wonderful.
I would love to read more!