|Reviews for Strength to Survive|
| eiyuang999 chapter 1 . 5/24/2010
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| loves him chapter 1 . 7/29/2008
[I am me, thank you ver much] edit: very
[Daddy walks up behind her and wraps his arms around Dari. She looks like she's sick, but doesn't move when he kisses her neck.] you repeated this part twice. Was this intentional. If so, you might want to add the word 'again', because it looks kind of like a typo
[If daddy says dance/Dari will stand up and twirl] I liked this description
[Which category would you?] an extra question mark here, by the looks of it.
[The two stare at each other for moments before her father stands up strait and looks at her for a moment.] edit: stands up traight
[Cyril kneels before the two graves] cyril or do you mean dari?
[Because both of us were silver/And I chose to lay and rust] I love this line by Cyril. Very nice metaphor.
Lovely, lovely play/musical you've got here. It's not something that I would usually read, but I really liked this. You can tell that Dari's heart has been broken time and time again, but at the same time, she still has some strength and courage to fight on. Just one question though. Is there any importance to Dari being called 'Dari girl'? Because whenever someone would call her Dari girl, I felt like they were talking down to her and repeating the same idea of how she's weaker and won't survive etc. etc. All in all, great job on this piece.
| xXxRhymexXx chapter 1 . 7/27/2008
Wow, this was a GREAT musical. I've been in several musicals throughout my life, and I thought that this was better than any of them that I've been in so far! You should send this to someone professional and get their attention! Keep up the fantastic work!
| J.N. Lloyd chapter 1 . 7/17/2008
This was one of the best musicals I've ever had the honor to read. I believe that musicals catch a lot of hell, people think that they are not complicated to write, but it takes a true talent to make them work. This story had so many twists, my attention was kept the whole time. I hope you send this to someone professional, someone who could get this attention. I really liked this. Keep writing.