Reviews for The Moth Paradox |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I love this, you weave in paradox into every thought. Personally I've never felt bad for moths, night time is more beautiful in many ways. Jack |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love the comparison of the eyes and i think it was wonderfully original. beautiful... |
![]() ![]() ![]() your imagery is just so beautiful i love it, all of it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the idea behind this. my only complaint is that the last line ends awkwardly. you should never end with a preposition (not only because it's grammatically incorrect) but also because it makes the it seem incomplete. |
![]() ![]() ![]() how do you do it? bring across a point and yet fold it so gently between words? your emotion and metaphors give me chills. this poem spoke so strongly of betrayal. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the imagery here because it is inventive and makes good use of figures of speech. I really liked 'the sun is always concerned with / whether or not he wakes', as well as when you connected the way the boy avoids the sun with a moth. The idea of sunburnt butterflies is very creative, especially how you used the eyes on their wings to extend the metaphor. There were two lines which I could not really understand though; 'like the mother who claimed was his' (is a word missing there?) and 'because he was his own son to beware of'. Is that a play on the words son and sun? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Liked that. And I admit it was the Moth that drew me in. Very different from my moth poem. Great imagry. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A beautiful piece... I really love the first line (awesome imagery), and there are other great ones throughout: "at least she still / pinpricks the darkness with her sewing needles" Very poetic and lovely. "maybe they are sunburnt butterflies / holding their grudges as eyes on the backs of their wings" More great imagery and very intriguing. I'm not sure I understand the last line, but maybe I'm not reading it properly (endings are always the hardest part, it's tricky business). A great piece, bravo! |