Reviews for The Moth Paradox
in theory chapter 1 . 8/13/2009
I love this, you weave in paradox into every thought. Personally I've never felt bad for moths, night time is more beautiful in many ways.

Jack
Fragile Things chapter 1 . 9/19/2008
i love the comparison of the eyes and i think it was wonderfully original. beautiful...
theoriginalprankster chapter 1 . 8/26/2008
your imagery is just so beautiful

i love it, all of it
Scarlett Wynter chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
I like the idea behind this. my only complaint is that the last line ends awkwardly. you should never end with a preposition (not only because it's grammatically incorrect) but also because it makes the it seem incomplete.
Sit In Solemn Silence chapter 1 . 7/20/2008
how do you do it? bring across a point and yet fold it so gently between words? your emotion and metaphors give me chills. this poem spoke so strongly of betrayal.
fairytale failure chapter 1 . 7/19/2008
I love the imagery here because it is inventive and makes good use of figures of speech. I really liked 'the sun is always concerned with / whether or not he wakes', as well as when you connected the way the boy avoids the sun with a moth. The idea of sunburnt butterflies is very creative, especially how you used the eyes on their wings to extend the metaphor. There were two lines which I could not really understand though; 'like the mother who claimed was his' (is a word missing there?) and 'because he was his own son to beware of'. Is that a play on the words son and sun?
AuroraDannon chapter 1 . 7/18/2008
Liked that. And I admit it was the Moth that drew me in. Very different from my moth poem. Great imagry.
The Hippie Nerd chapter 1 . 7/18/2008
A beautiful piece... I really love the first line (awesome imagery), and there are other great ones throughout:

"at least she still / pinpricks the darkness with her sewing needles" Very poetic and lovely.

"maybe they are sunburnt butterflies / holding their grudges as eyes on the backs of their wings" More great imagery and very intriguing.

I'm not sure I understand the last line, but maybe I'm not reading it properly (endings are always the hardest part, it's tricky business). A great piece, bravo!