|Reviews for Invisible Figure|
| DarkHunterer chapter 1 . 8/19/2008
Watch the spelling XD
All in all nice
If the rhyming were more precise
and filled with more spice
maybe i wouldn't have to criticize
| l3g3nd chapter 1 . 7/31/2008
Nice poem about loneliness and the life of an outcast.
| A. Lleyn chapter 1 . 7/21/2008
the begining and ending was great but you sort of lost me in the middle. it got very...well, it wasnt deep in the middle as compared to the start and end. erm, not sure if you wanted it to rhyme at first, then didn't follow through with it. like someone else said, the second stanza was nice cos u put vivid imaegry in 3rd stanza, which is supposed to be the climax of the whole thing...well, i think u hav a better way of phrasing it such words. it actually has a lot of meaning but i find the phrasing somewhat awkward. stanza four is nothing special. but ur ending rocked.
| The Exuberant chapter 1 . 7/20/2008
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/20/2008
"Each one, her hope fades,".. I felt like there should be a With before this line.
Really sad portrayal of how invisible people can be, nicely done. I really like your descriptions in the second stanza, the word choice "pallid" was really nice. I also like the emotion in this piece, it definitely makes you feel for her.
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