I loved this chapter (like I've loved all the others). But this chapter has really given a great deal of insight, which has helped quiet down my nagging questions. Well, thats not to say that I really like the steamy exchange between Cole and Sydney at the end P. Cant wait untill their relationship develops more...so exiting!

Keep up the great work and I beg, once again, to please be kind and update soon, I just cant stand the torture!

very interesting story the plot keeps my attentnion...I love the name cole and Alexander so you caught my attention

I've only read the first 2 chapters and it looks nearly flawless! But for one thing that sticks out: "My brother is only six months older than me" - I'm sorry to say that's impossible. Unless one or the other is adopted or Sidney is 3 months premature, it takes 9-10 months to "cook up" a baby. And while that would be interesting to see a lady who was not only 6 months pregnant with one baby, but simultaneously became pregnant with a 2nd child...

You get where I'm going with this ;-) Seriously though, I'm loving this. The way you write flows so well. Sidney "speaks" so... personably. Know what I mean? She's "feels" real. And that is some great character development developing there.

Great work! I'll be reading.

i love cupid! Great story idea. by the way.

I realy like your story. Update soon, m'kay?

i really enjoyed the ending of the chapter!

:D

i cant wait for more Cole and Sidney!

post asap

yay! for update

this story is great! i think the characters well developed, and I'm emotionally invested in them... in other words i care about whats going to happen.

i can't wait for the next chapter!

you have to update asap! I love this story it's so funny

You are a genius, a literary genius!

Once again, you have left me speechless. I just crave for more! Your chapters are full of comedy and mystery and I do love the little jealous outbursts coming from Cole. _

I love the character of Chad, wonder where you're going to lead that... And you say you improvised; impossible. Again, you are a genius! I really, really hope that you will be updating soon, very soon. I NEED to know what is going to happen next P.

Oh! And I love the psychic connection you are developing between Cole and Sydney ~sigh~ there is nothing compared to destined love…

Keep up the GREAT job!

Don’t take to long to update (pretty please)!

cute chapter!

cant wait for more

post asap!

Ooh! Intrigue!

I've never read a story with a plotline like this.

More, please!

ahahahah Oh la la!

The turning point of their relationship status! I love it. :D

You just leave me speechless!

I loved this chapter, it was spontaneous and funny. Loved the way you made their date become a total chaos, brilliant! Again, great job!

And please, please, don’t take to long on the update.

P.S. I love the scene on the beach, it made my heart flutter

hmm. i wonder when the 1760/2007 thing will... uh, intertwine? come in play? i guess. rofl, i can't rly think of the right word right now, but yeah.

oh, this is what i meant by... inappropriate punctuation/mechanical errors :

“I need your help,”

at the end of a dialogue, use a period instead of a comma, unless you add "he said" or something along those lines. b/c you make that mistake a lot. but that should be pretty easy to fix, right? (:

oh yeah, and sometimes you forget to put commas when... well, you need them. ex :

I looked briefly at the beach and gasped “You’re right!”

a comma should be after "gasped".

& :

“I know it’s just the beach but it looks better at night,” he told me, his eyes as opaque as ever.

comma after "beach". & etc; there's more. i'm just giving you a few examples.

but plot-wise, yay. actual love interest development! lol. but yeah, the last sentence was /perfect/ (if you change the comma to a period, of course.)

butthenagain, it seemed a little fast and... random? sort of? or maybe it's just me? haha idk. just wanted to let you know.

but yeah, let's see where this goes. keep it up (: