Reviews for Me? I'm with Cupid
underCOVERnali chapter 11 . 10/21/2008
I loved this chapter (like I've loved all the others). But this chapter has really given a great deal of insight, which has helped quiet down my nagging questions. Well, thats not to say that I really like the steamy exchange between Cole and Sydney at the end P. Cant wait untill their relationship develops exiting!

Keep up the great work and I beg, once again, to please be kind and update soon, I just cant stand the torture!
KinleyRoe22 chapter 11 . 10/20/2008
very interesting story the plot keeps my attentnion...I love the name cole and Alexander so you caught my attention
Chasing TeddyBears chapter 2 . 10/20/2008
I've only read the first 2 chapters and it looks nearly flawless! But for one thing that sticks out: "My brother is only six months older than me" - I'm sorry to say that's impossible. Unless one or the other is adopted or Sidney is 3 months premature, it takes 9-10 months to "cook up" a baby. And while that would be interesting to see a lady who was not only 6 months pregnant with one baby, but simultaneously became pregnant with a 2nd child...

You get where I'm going with this ;-) Seriously though, I'm loving this. The way you write flows so well. Sidney "speaks" so... personably. Know what I mean? She's "feels" real. And that is some great character development developing there.

Great work! I'll be reading.
stop-drop-and write chapter 11 . 10/20/2008
i love cupid! Great story idea. by the way.
Riley Hunter chapter 11 . 10/20/2008
I realy like your story. Update soon, m'kay?
Queen Of Laughs chapter 11 . 10/20/2008
i really enjoyed the ending of the chapter!


i cant wait for more Cole and Sidney!

post asap
palmsaresweaty chapter 11 . 10/20/2008
yay! for update
tundra101 chapter 10 . 10/17/2008
this story is great! i think the characters well developed, and I'm emotionally invested in them... in other words i care about whats going to happen.

i can't wait for the next chapter!
Classychik chapter 10 . 10/9/2008
you have to update asap! I love this story it's so funny
underCOVERnali chapter 10 . 10/8/2008
You are a genius, a literary genius!

Once again, you have left me speechless. I just crave for more! Your chapters are full of comedy and mystery and I do love the little jealous outbursts coming from Cole. _

I love the character of Chad, wonder where you're going to lead that... And you say you improvised; impossible. Again, you are a genius! I really, really hope that you will be updating soon, very soon. I NEED to know what is going to happen next P.

Oh! And I love the psychic connection you are developing between Cole and Sydney ~sigh~ there is nothing compared to destined love…

Keep up the GREAT job!

Don’t take to long to update (pretty please)!
Queen Of Laughs chapter 10 . 10/8/2008
cute chapter!

cant wait for more

post asap!
StarryKnight46 chapter 10 . 10/8/2008
Ooh! Intrigue!

I've never read a story with a plotline like this.

More, please!
Somedaymydreamswillcome chapter 9 . 10/1/2008
ahahahah Oh la la!

The turning point of their relationship status! I love it. :D
underCOVERnali chapter 9 . 9/30/2008
You just leave me speechless!

I loved this chapter, it was spontaneous and funny. Loved the way you made their date become a total chaos, brilliant! Again, great job!

And please, please, don’t take to long on the update.

P.S. I love the scene on the beach, it made my heart flutter
sunsetting chapter 9 . 9/28/2008
hmm. i wonder when the 1760/2007 thing will... uh, intertwine? come in play? i guess. rofl, i can't rly think of the right word right now, but yeah.

oh, this is what i meant by... inappropriate punctuation/mechanical errors :

“I need your help,”

at the end of a dialogue, use a period instead of a comma, unless you add "he said" or something along those lines. b/c you make that mistake a lot. but that should be pretty easy to fix, right? (:

oh yeah, and sometimes you forget to put commas when... well, you need them. ex :

I looked briefly at the beach and gasped “You’re right!”

a comma should be after "gasped".

& :

“I know it’s just the beach but it looks better at night,” he told me, his eyes as opaque as ever.

comma after "beach". & etc; there's more. i'm just giving you a few examples.

but plot-wise, yay. actual love interest development! lol. but yeah, the last sentence was /perfect/ (if you change the comma to a period, of course.)

butthenagain, it seemed a little fast and... random? sort of? or maybe it's just me? haha idk. just wanted to let you know.

but yeah, let's see where this goes. keep it up (:
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