Reviews for Me? I'm with Cupid
Written chapter 5 . 7/26/2008
:) nice work! this is a really cool story and I'm enjoying myself.
PepperVaughn chapter 4 . 7/24/2008
I find your story to be rather brilliant. It's a pretty interesting and very original. I can't wait for your next update.

Evil Kittens Unite chapter 4 . 7/24/2008
Looks like things are really picking up. I can't wait to see what happens next.

-Evil Kittens Unite
Let's Not and Say We Did chapter 4 . 7/23/2008
Yay! I like this story! Please update!
Renana chapter 4 . 7/23/2008
Interesting, update soon :) I think the only problem is that the protagonist does a bit too much explaining, but your writing is great!

and I just wanted to point out that Aphrodite is a goddess though I'm sure you know that; no biggie
Ginger Ale Bandita chapter 4 . 7/23/2008
Ooh, this is one of the most creative story ideas I've read in a while. I'm super-intrigued...definitely looking forward to your next update!
daysend chapter 4 . 7/23/2008
I really want to see her brothers reaction when he see "Cupid". I am looking forward to the next chapter or 2 because I am assuming one of them will take place at a school of some sort, I always love school chapter. She gets to go from just being there to dating a 'god'. Anyway good chapter, I enjoyed it hope to see more soon.
Amaury chapter 3 . 7/21/2008
Slow moving.

It got alright near the end of chapter two, but I only skimmed a lot of the prologue and first chapter because I become so bored.


Keep trying though!

Practice makes perfect. :]]
daysend chapter 3 . 7/21/2008
It's an interesting story. My only complaint would be that the pro-log/beginning was kind of dull and long. It started to pick up in the 3rd chapter. My interest really peaked right at the end, I hope we get to see the next chapter soon.
Evil Kittens Unite chapter 2 . 7/21/2008
Wow, your first story (on fiction press) that's exciting. :3

I know that you have only posted two chapters, but my biggest criticism is that not much happens. Your prologue is functional-as in you introduce the protagonist and her dilemma - yet it is not exceptionally interesting. Even if the rest of your story is brilliant, no one will read it if they don't enjoy the first chapter.

Good Writing.
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