Reviews for Love, Give Me Redemption |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Ugh, I love them - this was fantastic. I have not read your other stories yet, but that's next on my to-do list. Fantastic - thank you! |
![]() ![]() After I and my lover spent about 4 years together, my boyfriend told me that we can not be together. and already We were making ready ourselves to get married this year and I was very happy and absolutely ready to marry him. this breakup started when he went a little far from the city where I live, a year before. He found a good job out there. And he promised me to come back in one or two years. In the mean time, I found a job around his place (we take it as a good opportunity for us to start living together) but the company I worked for resist to leave me since I am a responsible person in the company. They offered me a very nice salary increment with huge responsibility of work. Then I told to my boyfriend I preferred to stay where I live and work, since, he has not a plan to live there forever. He was very upset at the moment... and ignored me totally. I tried to contact him but I can’t. Following so much effort he sends me a message saying "our relationship is over". I never expected such a thing to happen, so I got sick. Even after so much begging he allow me to see him, but told me the same thing that it is over. I asked him the real reason. He said, you never listened to me, you never gave me credit, and you disrespected me…..and so on. I never noticed such a thing in our relationship before, so I got shocked and couldn’t say a word in front of him. For me our relationship was perfect. And I really love him. I want to be with him. I send so many letters saying I’m sorry, I tried to contact him but there is no reply. I did everything to attract him and live with him forever but nothing was going through. so I needed a help on how to get my lover back. I had the feeling that he still loves me, though he did not say a word. I needed help seriously. I thought it will never possible to get him back and be the happy couple again? so when I read testimonies about I contacted him and he told me that my case is a simple one to solve, so after his consultation and casting of this spell, my boyfriend emailed me telling me he was sorry for all that he did to me, that he is ready to marry me now, I was shocked, I never believed that GREAT SAMURA could make such thing to happen with his spell, today I am getting married to my boyfriend, and I will never forget this spell caster I will always talk about him anywhere I go Angelina hocombe. |
![]() ![]() ![]() To our dearest Guest, If you read farther into the story you would see that Ian is not Irish but Scottish. Good day. - Anna |
![]() ![]() Highlanders are in Scotland, not Ireland. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm finding I like the spacing you have going on. So much better than it was. Although the complete line seems a bit much when the scene doesn't change, just the point of view. Maybe stars ** would be better to use for POV change and the complete line when there is a time jump or a scene change. Just a thought. Still really enjoying the story though :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm liking your stories. Just wanted to point out something really quick. While I like reading from both of the main characters point of view, I find I'm getting a little confused when there isn't a break or something that will let the reader know the POV has changed. Other than that, I like it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOL "Hi, Grandda Liam". |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved the first one, and I can't wait to finish this one! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well this was good. It wasn't as good as LOve at Gunpoint but still good. It waS very confusing throughout but it worked with the story. I felt bad for Rory :( at least it kind of worked out at the end. I think that that was a very good ending because if I was her I wouldn't put my heart on the line for Ian a second time too. I wouldn't want to go through that pain again so that was a fine choice indeed. And you never know maybe she will trust him eventually in the next story :D I can't wait to read it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() WHOA! Very very awesome! I like how you build your characters, I like how you keep the readers in suspense. Its nice how you have everything planned out and you follow through. :) I can't wait to read more about them later in your series! Congrats on an AWESOME story. Seriously- become a novelist. At least as a side thing to another job if thats what you want. I'm going to england this summer and it just makes me want to go to Scotland too! I wanna find a hot highlander with an awesome accent! Haha. |
![]() ![]() ![]() okay, im sorry, but what is up with suddenly switching from the first person POV of Rory, to the POV of Ian? its really badly done. like, you could have put a break line in or something, not just stuck it in. the first time i saw it, i thought it was an error but you did it again. it very much takes away from what, otherwise, is a very engaging story. |
![]() ![]() I took long again X_X, but anyways! Good news is i'm not confused anymore D. But man! cant they be happy?, I'll make an account to just put you on my watchlist and I might attempt to write stuff, but I dont think so xD, anyways!, see you more often hopefully! ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi, I read this the day before yesterday, but FP wouldn't allow me to post anonymously, so I'm back with an account because after I'd read the first installment today, I just can't not comment. The effort you've put into writing this amazes me. Unless that dialect comes to you naturally. In that case, I'm just envious. I was always in love with Ireland, Scotland not so much, though its history always fascinated me too (history is one of my majors), but dammit, those hunks you've come up with make me want to leave everything and go to Scotland. Haha (: Sorry, I digress too much, what I'm trying to say is that you've done a great job creating characters, fleshing them out and making them believeable and, more importantly, ALIVE. The chemistry is really good, I was completely immersed in the anger and the tears and whatnot. The plot was interesting too and I loved it that it didn't have a corny ending. I mean, I love fluff, but the way you ended Ian's and Rory's story (in this installment, at least) was perfect :D The only thing I minded, and only in the beginning 'cause I got used to it later, was that you'd switch from first person singular to third person singular and interrupt the narration. I understand why, but it still bugged me. Unfortunately, I don't have any suggestion as to how you could avoid this change of voice. Frankly, the dialect and dialogue (especially the witty ones) make up for it, so it's not as big of a setback. I really enjoyed reading this, it had depth in all the important places, but it was still fun and funny. One thing though, I have no idea why, but I kept forgetting the story was set in the 21st century (later on when Rory and Ian ended up in Scotland). Whenever jeans were mentioned, I would do the facepalm gesture (: Great job! Can't wait to read the third part of the Highlander series :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() hiya wow that was intense. I hope she doesn't die, but it sure does sound like it. Can't wait to read some more. Great starting point. Angel |
![]() ![]() ![]() ah, so bittersweet but i still love it. |