Reviews for like a sunburn, only not
t-t-t-ouch chapter 1 . 8/9/2008
Your writing is wonderful,

I loved the fact you used a twenty-dollar bill,

instead of heart.

Bravo.
mate.feed.kill.repeat chapter 1 . 7/29/2008
Cynical and comical as always.

I love the second stanza. "hang it up / while i lounge around / in my pink muscle dress, / let the humidity pierce / through me like a pin." It says a lot about what summer really is like.

Damn, now I really want to go swimming.

-stix-
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 7/29/2008
"so i'll let-myself turn magenta", caught me off guard in a good way. A unique unexpected abstract visual. The first stanza runs marvelously and descends at an excellent stopping point. Great aside also, it ushers in the tone so fluidly. This really has a splash visual quality to it, like you've just let the reader enter into the middle of a visual and continue from an insiders viewpoint. Great write. MD:77.
bipedalcooney chapter 1 . 7/26/2008
Wow, absolutely gorgeous. "Pink muscle dress." Really unique. Awesome job and keep writing! Thanks so much for the review!
siphoned afterglow chapter 1 . 7/26/2008
i just love the way you can take something so simple and write such amazing poetry about it. i like how you've worded this whole thing (and yes i know i completely suck at giving nice reviews)

lovely work.
she smolders chapter 1 . 7/25/2008
This was a little graphic and great and I loved it.