Reviews for When It Rains
Auguste Mae chapter 1 . 11/5/2008
I love how music is woven into this poem. (The title, of course is Paramore and was it intentional that you put "Black Holes"? because since I am the Muse fan that I am, I saw a Muse lyric. Ha.) "Words rescuing me from my tears" is so true. Music is such a healer. Terrific job, as always!
The Wandering Musician chapter 1 . 8/4/2008
This is beautiful! I love the idea of "drowning inside, from the tears I don't dare to cry" (though I think leaving out the comma might be better there). I love it when it rains, and this poem reflected very well some of the emotions I connect with rain.

I think the last stanza could be refined a little more because it is a little disjointed. The image of black holes came out of nowhere for me, and I think it might be better if you mentioned it elsewhere in the poem to tie it in better.

Anyway, great job!

~Daughter of the Faeries