Reviews for Staying Away from Wonderland |
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![]() ![]() ![]() this is really a fantastic piece thoroughly impressed -Lady from Lady and Eve |
![]() ![]() ![]() "and the sunshine in her hair started to leak out when i lost the bath plugs to the drain of her youth-" AMAZING. You're a talented writer. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooh, smooth and sexy. I mean, it's not really sexy, but there's something very sensual and naughty about it. Love that. I love all the descriptions of "Alice," her skin, how pale and innocent she is. Really interesting piece. I think Alice in Wonderland could be written about a million times (and probably has) and not get old. Keep writing! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i am unsure of what i find of this perhaps something about subtle imagery and i always wished i knew the inspiration when people write but then again, that ruins it for the person who is trying to find themselves in it |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOVE it. Great imagery. You're a fanstastic writer. Love the Alice in Wonderland inspiration. Bravo, bravo. |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha i like, i like. i am a sucker for alice in wonderland. i like your use of repetition, there was no consistency in each stanza with it, and i think that added to the atmosphere of confusion and haywire. ness. haha. also 'colorless hair that/absorbed the liquid/of sunshine' is absolutely brilliant imaging. why didn't i think of that :'( great job :D |