Reviews for Staying Away from Wonderland
Lady and Eve chapter 1 . 4/5/2010
this is really a fantastic piece

thoroughly impressed

-Lady from

Lady and Eve
softersin chapter 1 . 1/5/2009
"and the sunshine

in her hair started to

leak out when i lost the

bath plugs to the drain of her

youth-"

AMAZING.

You're a talented writer.
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 7/29/2008
Ooh, smooth and sexy. I mean, it's not really sexy, but there's something very sensual and naughty about it. Love that. I love all the descriptions of "Alice," her skin, how pale and innocent she is. Really interesting piece. I think Alice in Wonderland could be written about a million times (and probably has) and not get old. Keep writing! :)
Aquafied chapter 1 . 7/29/2008
i am unsure of what i find of this

perhaps something about subtle imagery and i always wished i knew the inspiration when people write

but then again, that ruins it for the person who is trying to find themselves in it
AspiringWriter05 chapter 1 . 7/28/2008
LOVE it. Great imagery. You're a fanstastic writer. Love the Alice in Wonderland inspiration. Bravo, bravo.
english summer rain chapter 1 . 7/28/2008
haha i like, i like. i am a sucker for alice in wonderland. i like your use of repetition, there was no consistency in each stanza with it, and i think that added to the atmosphere of confusion and haywire. ness. haha. also 'colorless hair that/absorbed the liquid/of sunshine' is absolutely brilliant imaging. why didn't i think of that :'(

great job :D