|Reviews for I'll scream for you|
| if.i.had.1.wish chapter 1 . 11/7/2008
Ooh I was singing it with some random tune and I like :P
| May Elizabeth chapter 1 . 8/14/2008
Beautiful. You sound like me. ]Peace.
| Averybarbarian chapter 1 . 8/14/2008
Wonderfully done! The words flow smoothly in this piece and relay the need to protect. I especialy liked the lines in the bridge "I'll show you the future's flame/that burns every thing that hurts you." The need to protect. Well done! I enjoyed reading this piece. Keep writing! )
| AK the Twilight chapter 1 . 8/11/2008
You really nailed the formatting of the different choruses and pre-choruses, though I couldn't help but thinking of how you could make each description a bit more intricate. What I'm saying is that the whole screaming concept feels a bit overdone.
I do like the lines like "How high can you fly / without wings?," it's just that lines like these are so few and the choruses are too short and generally saturate the song.
This isn't your best work, though it's well-constructed. Just try to add a bit more flair to the language next time. Don't worry; this is a good song. It's just not the most vivid one. All in all, this was a good read.
| A Phoenix inside chapter 1 . 8/11/2008
i like it alot espescially the lines i'll scream for yo so listen to me though i dont say anything. i have always talked about unheard screams because no one can here them
| Scarlett Wynter chapter 1 . 8/9/2008
I agree with simpleplan13's suggestions. But I have to say, this is really cool. I could totally listen to this with some guitars jamming in the background :)
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 7/29/2008
"The short life is a long search"... I would say this instead of the
"I'll escape with you where sun shines." escape with you to where otherwise it seems like you're escaping the place where the sun does shine
"Sometimes your voice can't be listened"... listened to or heard
I really REALLY like the bridge. The rest of it is nice too, makes a great point, but I really like that image a lot.