Reviews for Hesitation
S. M. Saves chapter 1 . 8/2/2008
Wow! The things that happen when we're not looking. That is exactly what this piece shows. The only thing I would suggest is taking out the line "did I mention that we lived in a solitary place?" because it breaks the fearful feeling. The guy who murdered her parents is running away from the house and she sees that he is the same guy from her dream. Adding that line would be like deciding to paint your nails during a funeral. (laughs) It kinda kills the feeling.

Other than that, nice job.