Reviews for The Wall Was Still Only Half Covered
Koki Enwai chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
This was really intense and altogether an awesome story. My only nitpick would be that the "He woke. She woke." bit was repeated a bit too much, but that's just my opinion.

Loved it!

- Koki
Tranquil Thorns chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
Wow, that was really excellent! I honestly couldn't stop reading.

I love your use of repetition and the way she grows more and more helpless and insane after each 'waking'. This reminds me a little of Nightmare on Elm Street, though here it's the villain who dreams as well. I love the way he's so eerily patient while he slowly makes his victim more and more crazy.

Definitely a favorite. )
S. M. Saves chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
This piece was very intense. The repeating drove on the rhythm or the pulse of the piece. My only concern is that you might have been able to create the same impression with less repeats. That's all.

Nice job.