Reviews for Exceptionally Average
K. L. Verne chapter 2 . 8/10/2008
I've never quite understood why stories about everyday people are not more popular in today's culture. True, they don't have the same excitement of any of the current blockbuster thrillers, but there's something just as interesting in reading about normal people. You capture the confusion and panic of being a new student wonderfully. I've never been a new student, but I've been in situations where I have no idea what's going on, which is just as awkward and embarrassing. You've done a good job with that. :)

For the record, I love Seth in all his bold, quick-witted cleverness. Almost as much as I love Aaron's comforting sensitivity. At least, those were my first observations of the characters. And, of course, Kate is a relief in the sea of ridiculous female characters that make up FictionPress.

In fact, the entire story is a relief in a sea of ridiculous stories that make up FictionPress. Your writing style is refreshing and intelligent. Your characters are realistic and their development is done very nicely. The plot seems to have a purpose. Words are spelled right. Proper grammar is used. And your dialogue is punctuated properly. (I have a theory that only 10% of the writers on FictionPress know how to properly punctuate dialogue...)

I actually had abandoned FictionPress for an extended period of time because I was discouraged by the utter lack of good literature. I only returned today on a whim and am pleasantly surprised to find that talented writers still exist. So, to make a long review short, thank you. And keep up the good work! (I'll be around to keep tabs on the story's progress.)

(Oh, and, by the way, I'm fairly certain creeper is a universal word. At least, it should be. We use it quite liberally here in Pennsylvania.)
ahemmy chapter 2 . 8/10/2008
Creeper is a fine word to use. :]

So far so good. The two boys, ecspecially the one from history class, seem interesting.

Can't wait until the next chapter!
Koki Enwai chapter 2 . 8/10/2008
Ah, another good chapter. It's such a relief that I can just read this and enjoy without having to pick out spelling and grammar errors. Very nice quality of writing overall.

I liked the introduction of Aaron's character, and the expansion of Seth's. At the moment, I like Seth better, but I'm quite curious to see who she will take more of an interest in throughout the course of the story.

Well, that's about all that I can say. I'm really loving it.

- Koki
Gazing The Sky chapter 2 . 8/10/2008
Great story! I really like the fact that she is having troubles in her new school, because that happens offten in real life too! Can't wait for the next chapter!
chrissayyy chapter 2 . 8/10/2008
I love you're writing skills, I could read this story all day!

Seth seems like a good guy, but I completely forgot his name and had to go back to Chapter One to find it. Can't wait for chapter three! Update soon please.
ahemmy chapter 1 . 8/7/2008
This is so good so far! I'll be sure to watch for the next chapter.
TuneOut chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
You are a good writer. That much is true. You captured her nervousness well along with her being overwhelmed. I'm not sure if there's really that much of a difference between Colorado and New Jersey but if there is, I'm not surprised. New Jersey generally has excellent schools and is up there in education.

I'm not sure if I feel this way because I live in New Jersey or what but I'm kind of bothered by how you chose to portray the teacher. I get that its supposed to show how out of her league she is here but I can't get over how that would never happen. I can't really think that a teacher would be intentionally rude like that. Since this is the first chapter, I'm not sure if the teacher is an unusually arrogant teacher so I'll let it go. Or maybe I misinterpreted his actions.

AP classes for my school district along with others in the Monmouth area (from what I hear and know) aren't really offered until junior year. My school offers AP US History to sophmores but it's a two year course and the first year is technically called advanced honors. The college board ruled it so that a class can only be called AP if you take the AP exam at the end of the year in May.

I hope I don't come off as a know it all. You probably know all of this if you live in New Jersey.
Koki Enwai chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
First impression: You're obviously a talented writer. I'm excited already! I like the way you introduced the main character and how she views school; how she's nervous about being in a new one, but somewhat comforted that English is just English. Can't be too hard, after all.

Good job introducing right away that this was a different sort of class. The teacher, though he may seem strict, came across as quite believeable, so nice work with that.

The prose itself is really well done, I might add. Not clunky or anything. It flows well and I feel like I'm reading a professional's work.

Also, just to mention, some high schools (or maybe just mine) offer AP classes during grades 9-12, because for my freshman year, I was up for AP classes in English and Math. But maybe that's just a regional thing.

I can honestly say that, so far, I really like Katherine, and maybe even Seth as well. Just his demeanor and the way you described him so far makes him rather intriguing in my opinion. . . I'm anxious to learn more about him.

All in all, this was great. I'd have to say it's the best piece of fiction I've read on this site in at least six months. I can only hope that you'll carry this talent throughout the entirety of this story and not make it all cheesy and corny and whatnot. You have a true gift.

I'm jealous, and waiting for more.

- Koki
BluePillow chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
How awful being so out of place in class! I kinda know the feeling... But I loved it! Update soon plz!
chrissayyy chapter 1 . 8/3/2008
I liked this story! It's extremely well written, and it's very entertaining. You have a lot of potential with this story and I want to see where you take this. Please update soon! :)

and check out my new story!

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