Reviews for Out of Luck
xxSongBirdxx chapter 18 . 1/8/2014
So fluffy full of so many feels right now
xxSongBirdxx chapter 16 . 1/8/2014
What a douche bag he's only worried about his inheritance the ass, glad Aidan punched him he sooo deserves it
xxSongBirdxx chapter 15 . 1/8/2014
Well its good he's not going to give in so easily and he's going to think about it first.
xxSongBirdxx chapter 14 . 1/8/2014
jeez shes so needy its kind of annoying but love Aidan
xxSongBirdxx chapter 13 . 1/8/2014
Doctor Aidan to the rescue haha
xxSongBirdxx chapter 12 . 1/8/2014
That asswipe. Well it was to be expected
xxSongBirdxx chapter 8 . 1/8/2014
Gosh this was painful poor Aidan poor Kate
xxSongBirdxx chapter 6 . 1/8/2014
she's gonna be stupid and get back with Charlie and then Aidan going to move on...
leavesfallingup chapter 1 . 10/9/2013
A good beginning. Charlie needs to lighten up or let Kate go. Dr. Kelley didn't seem interested, though it was unusual for him to personally check her out of the hospital and get the wheelchair.
asianinvasion0530 chapter 18 . 7/13/2013
Awwww this story was so cute! I finished it all in one sitting. Aiden is absolutely adorable and swoon-worthy and I'm so glad that Kate got a happy ending with him! :)
Tough Love chapter 18 . 11/28/2012
The story had some meat but you have a terrible case of showing and not telling. alot of this was repetitive and frankly a little childish, and annoying not to mention the dialogue was innatural. With all that being said, if you re wrote it it coould be better and realistic. Also, with the amount of times you made aiden talk about locking the door i would have assumed that you would give a reason why. Like his wife got killed during a home invasion or something... or create some havoc with charlie stalking her...

theres so much that could be done and you could make this story great and ready for publishing if you tried
FreekyDisaster18 chapter 1 . 11/25/2012
Hey, I'm here to share some exciting news! This story has added to the Love Triangle category over on A Drop of Romeo! :)

Here's the Review:

"Helen Thinks: Her fifth hospital visit in only two months and Kate realises that maybe she has become a pretty unlucky person, especially seeing as before then the only time she had ever been in hospital was her birth. However, could she really be that unlucky when she meets that gorgeous Doctor? Well, yes because she happens to have met this gorgeous doctor at a time where’s she unsure of where her relationship with long term boyfriend, Charlie, is heading. The chance meeting of the handsome doctor outside of the hospital and forming a friendship; most definitely just a friendship; is enough to create doubts.

I truthfully believe that writing love triangles is one of the hardest things a writer can do but nkltt210 make it look like a walk in the park in ‘Out of Luck’. Each character has their own individual quirks and characteristics that enable the reader to start picking sides, especially where the two male characters are concerned. Nkltt210 has managed to create a plot that flows fluently and most definitely has a perfect pace to it that will have you sitting on the edge of your seat, yelling at the computer screen and feeling completely flustered as things either do or do not go your own way.

If this did not sell the story enough, there is an added bonus of nkltt210 manages to infiltrate light moments of humour throughout the story that will have the reader laughing along. It’s these fragments of humour that helps the characters become three dimensional and the interactions between the scenes completely realistic.

In all, ‘Out of Luck’ is a humorous, well thought out story that has you clicking the next button eager for more and feeling that warm bubbly feeling of happiness at the end."

Keep writing,

Helen xo
brinalovesyouxx chapter 18 . 10/17/2012
One of the best stories i have ever read. One day i want to find me own "Aiden" :) the story was beautiful and i cant wait to read any more of your stories so keep uo the awesome work :) xx
MuffinsRoxSox chapter 18 . 8/16/2011
Oh my gosh. Aiden is so cute! I love him!

You know what my cousin told me? (Well, not specifically me, 'cause we were have a group discussion during lunch at her engagement party) You shouldn't marry a lawyer. They'll work too much and never spend any time at home or cheat on you. Lol. Kinda funny, huh?

Kate and Aiden are adorable together, I love them. :) One of my favorite scenes is when she and Avery were getting drunk. "I'd rather crawl the hobble." lol. I love that.
AJS chapter 18 . 5/18/2011
I agree. Aiden is too perfect. I know he always protested it but how would he be perfect if he didn't protest it? lol. I think he always said that but it would have been nice to see some of his faults as well. It would have made him more humane.

I think in general this story was really good and sweet but a little more depth would have been nice. I feel like you just described and summarized a lot of things that I actually would have liked to see. For example, those 48 hours in the hospital when they first met. I wish I had more insight as to how Aiden fell for her in the first place. It also would have been nice to see more of Aiden's struggle and how his past relationship problems played a role in his new relationship with Kate. I feel like that was something that potentially could have affected their relationship but was just kind of brushed over.

Cute though. Very cute. And as I said. Aiden is just perfect. :)

- Alyssa
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