|Reviews for Jesus|
| May Elizabeth chapter 1 . 8/28/2008
Nice. Since I don't really write haikus, except when I was forced to in english class *grumbles* I don't know if this needs improvement...But it looks good to me...o.0...lol
| likes to headbang chapter 1 . 8/20/2008
the title itself was an attention-grabber, but u even made it rhyme! well-done
| Savella chapter 1 . 8/13/2008
It's pretty good, but I think the last line can be changed. Maybe you could substitute "With rejoice I sing" with "In my joy I sing". I dunno. Great first try, though! Haikus are confusing to write!
| Lostwind chapter 1 . 8/6/2008
Haiku's don't have to rhyme, but all to more to you to be able to. Very nice, very good for a first Haiku. Keep up the good work.
| Needa S chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
First time I ever saw a Haiku rhyme. Beautifully done just the same.
| TragicDreams chapter 1 . 8/5/2008
Again, I like the flow and the rhyme scheme. I definitely like the topic. Very true. Well done.
| AspiringWriter05 chapter 1 . 8/4/2008
i like it, but Haiku is an unrhymed type of poetry, but that cool that you were able to make it rhyme. Keep up the great writing and be sure to check out some of my other poems :)