I really like Quinn's voice in this. It feels very very distinct to me and very 'guy-ish,' which is nice. And hahaha, poor Quinn. I don't know why I love the guy so much. In all honesty I should probably despise him, but he just amuses me to no end instead.

Oh dear. Quinn really has some bad luck, doesn't he?

Haha, I really like Mrs. Abbot, too. I hope she shows up a lot in this story.

I love Quinn! Haha, so much. He sort of reminds me of Frank, except not really.

"Her cousin was, for shit’s sake, named Helga." -hahaha that was the best line ever. Oh Quinn. I feel bad for him already. Hee.

I absolutely love this beginning. It's like so formal but at the same time it fits the setting perfectly. It's so intriguing and I really love the ending cause I feel like it just sucks you in. Anyway, I'm so excited to read the rest of this!

Ooh, I really like how things are going on! Thank you for writing so much, and I am glad that I've got my holidays so that I can find the time to read all those chapters you launch at once ;-) Hey, great writing, write on!

I really like this story! i was so busy, but when i started reading this, i just ditched everything and started reading ahaha.

I've decided that I like the second Mary more than the first. She seems like a better person. Not seventh-grade-ish.

The third Mary looks like she'll be fun.

-Ali

I'm really liking this story so far! I really love Mrs. Abott's chapters. I love how she's so oblivious.

But a few things that you may want to consider:

1. You might want to combine Mrs. Abott's chapters with the Quinn chapters. Maybe put them at the end of Quinn's chapters. It would make more sence, seeing that they're so short.

2. Why don't you try publishing only one chaoter a day? I opened my inbox today and was like 'WHOA! That's A LOT of chapters!' publishing so many in a day REALLY overwelms the reader (and their inboxes) and it would also make more people read it because it would be on the first page of the Young Adult section for more time.

3. I'm sort of getting that you're going by the stereotype that most girls are ditzy. I completely agree with that, but you're making it sound as if ALL girls are ditzy, and that the second Mary was the only exception. Could you maybe introduce MORE types of people, so that it doesn't come off like that?

I actually adore this story.

It's amazing.

It entertained me and that's very hard to do.

I'll keep reading.

- Katie x

I love this story and how you write! The only thing that confuses me, is why he's such an asshole to girls, but does have a best friend who is a girl. If he was real and was my best friend and he said things like that to other girls, I don't know if I would still like him..

So I really like this story so far. The only thing that confused me was the First Mary chapter. I didn't really understand what was going on in the first part of it.

Other than that, it's great and I can't wait for more.

-Ali

Oh awesome! I love your twist on such a classic cliche.

:P Nice fic! I look forward to updates!