Reviews for Friends, Pals, A Helping Hand
dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 9/14/2008
I like the last stanza becaus the simplicity carried a lot of meaning.

I didn't like the simplicity of the first two stanzas, though, because it made it feel choppy an ddetracted from the impact of the last one.

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half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 8/12/2008
konban wa

Aw, I liked it. Thank goodness it wasn't rhyming. When I see the words "my first poem," I think, "Oh no... a rhyming poem without a doubt." To tell you I was pleasantly surprised would be quite an understatement. ) Very nice poem; I hope you keep up the motivation and the writing. So different from the dark poems now loading fictionpress (of which I donate quite a few *wink*). I refreshing change to be sure.

Ha det

Shan
The Exuberant chapter 1 . 8/6/2008
its a good poem for a first