Reviews for how she lives now |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I liked this. It was full of hurt and angst, but it was told in a unique way, which makes this poem universal; captivating. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is a beautiful poem. i mean that. to tell you the truth, i fully commend you for incorporating an actual plot into such a short piece without it seeming like far too short of a glimpse into the life or plot. it's really interesting. i like the lines about the baker's boy. i want to plaster them somewhere or maybe just read them again i feel the transition w/ the "but" after the baker's boy lines is a little abrupt though this: "at her when she passes him. but he does not know she will make her way..." it seems choppy and i was like WOAH PLOT TWIST WTH WHERE DID THAT COME FROM :) but it could be fixed i guess by making the 'but..' another stanza and adding just a little bit of transition description if you want to of course or you can totally leave it, and i'll still think you're a wonderful, beautiful girl. :] the first stanza is so pretty in its wording. gah! i wish you would have spent another couple of words on the carpet but maybe that's just because of my recent obsession w/ the word red haha keep writing~ ty. |