I have to say, you are the most creative writer on this website. I loved the story. I also liked how Violet cried and screamed when Dyami left with Fauna... which foreshadows what was about to happen. It was ironic too. Anyway, can't wait to read more of ur stuff! Keep writing!

"A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding gift a reader can give . Please use this golden opportunity to offer a well deserved praise and/or tips for improvement. " They have this on the bottom of the review sheet now...

Anyway, dang, perfect halloween story, huh? This story is way creepy-er than all of the stories with demons and vampires in them. I love them anyway! . Anyway, dang, what an experience reading that death. How depressing and utterly horrifying! It made me think of girls who are murdered by their insane boyfriends. but this has a better reason for it. Have you seen Misery? Dang, this reminded me of that movie, only Dyami was the crazy nurse, and Nara died anyway. I kindof liked the way she died. It was totally unique! A great ending.

Oh wow I think that was the best possible ending for this story, I'm glad it ended this way and not the vision I had imagined. Good job, VERY good job. I hope you create another wonderful story such as this in the near future.

Potent shit is right. I can't think of a word to add to that word. Tetrablah blah blah. Anyways I hate it when stories end, because it means it's done, but then it means more to come. So that's good. I really liked the ending. It takes a very very very good author to be able to write anything and write it well. You do it always. I love it. As for your review, thank you. I've already said it, but I don't care if its harsh or whatever I just like it so I can become better. So that I know my work is somewhat likable, and that when I read it five years from now I won't be all "Holy shit that sucks." Oh and story ideas, I'd totally love it if you did a faery story. Not like Tinkerbell pixie happy crap. I mean like dark faery changelings and spells and covers and in city slums and all that stuff. Take a few options put em' together, write it well and what do you have? Another awesome story from BDhei(or my other top four. You're just numero Uno well over here. {At FanFiction it'd be different cuz that's for fan written fiction, obviously. :)} I just like you a lot. Lol in a non lesbian way. Which reminds me, I know nothing about you. Other then what's on your profile. Which btw, Rasta is also a government? Right Rastafarianism(I hope I spelt that right) So this review turned into a question/request/ thing? Idk. I'm really out of it. So I don't care. Anyways aweseome job. I'm gonna go find some new words to use in my reviews. Or since I rarely find stories that don't have some good in it. Look for some crappy stuff to review. Not really, I wouldn't wanna read it. Well mispelled words and atrocious grammer anyways. I'ma shut up before this review ends up like on my actual speaking paragraphs. I'm crazy.

The point of this review-Fucking amazing job, I loved the ending. I can't wait to read more from you.

Love Middi~

U SHUD STOP RITING WIHLE U R AHEAD GURLFREND. DIS IS A TRANEWRECK FROMM START 2 FINSH. I CANT UNDERTSNAD ANY OF IT.

DIAF!1221 EDWARD CULLEN IS AHMAZING

i dun get it. O FUCK. CAPS.

N E WAYZ. I DUNT THINK U EVN TRIED 2 MAKE SENCE DER DID U? THOT WE WUDNT NOTISE? NICE TI MISSY. NICE TRY. SHE CANT BE HIM!12 ITZ IMPOSBLE. I HOPE U RELIZE I AM GOIN TO REPORT U FOR NOTRITING DIS COREKTLY.

JoNAS BROTHRS 4EVA~! Plz red my orisinal fiction bout me unD JOE JONAS.

nobudy LIKES U AND U HAVE NO FRIENDS.

RMEEMBR THAT WHEN YOU DIAF. PLZ TO BE REDING PRV COMMENT 2 UNDERSTAND DAT.

I DIDT UNERSTAND DIS CHAPTR. Y DIDNT DEY HOLD HANDZ OR KISS OR DO CUPPLY THINGS. AHVE U NEVER DATED A BOI? DEY DO THS. R U A LEZBAIN?./

DIAF!1

DO U NO WAT DAT MEANS? I BET YU donT becuz uR DUMB. IT MEANS DIE IN A FIRE AND ITS HOW I FELL BOUT U

ILL GIVE U UR HONESTLY REVIEW HERE! YU SUK. EVRYTHIN BOUT U SUX. I CNAT BELEIVE PPL READ DIS ND TELL U IT IS GUD. WHY IS DER NO WINGS? VAMPIREZ WIT WINGS WUD MAKE DIS FIC READEBLE OKAY. Y DONT U TAK MY ADVICE EVR? I DUNT LYKE WEN DYNAMI &NARA DONT ACT LIKE HAPPY CUPPLES. PLZ CHANGES DIS.

PS.X NARA IS A BOY NAME!11! OK LOL U SUKC

WHY R U NOT REVIWING 4 ME? I AM REVIEWING UR STORIS. O OK1 I GET IT1 IT BECUZ I AM NOT RESPND TO DA AKSHUAL MATEERAL RIGHT? FINE1 NARA IST EVIL BLA BLAH BLA, DNAYMI TRI TO KILL HER (EVEN THO HE SPOSED TO LOVE HER!1 SO OKAY WTU IST UP WITH DAT?) AND DEN SHE SING TO HIM. I DONT GET IT.

UR STORY DUSNT MAKE SENSE!12'2'2!1 WHY

I DUNT KNO WHY I KEEP REEDING DEESE BECUZ U OBVSLY CANT RITE 2 SAIV UR LIFE. DO U NO TAHT? DYMAI CANT HATE CIHLDREN U MORONE! HEZ N A RELAISHUNSHIP AND HASS 2 GET NARA PREGNINT. GOD UR DUM. AND nara wud have cRIED IF DAT RLY HAPEND WT DA BLOOD OKAY? Y R U NOT BEING REALSITIC?

plz review plz. I will keep reviewig urs if u read mine

O JA. I RLY BET U HAV A BLAK GURLS BOOTY OK?/ STOP TRYINGF 2 SHOW OFF, GOD. U WRITE TRBLE FILLR CHAPTERS. WHER WER DA REALYSTIK PARTZ LIKE DYNAMI MISSINF NARAA? EVRYON KNOS THATZ WAT BOIS DO.

GOD. I CUD CLERLY RITE DIS BETR DEN U.

PLZ REVIEW MY STORIES THO, K?

DIE!1

UR A POZER AND U CANT HAV EDWARD HE IS MEIN. I HOPE U GET EETIN BY RATS BECUZ U DDInt rite THIS CHATPER HOW I WANTED. WAT IS RONG WIT U?

DIE

U SUCK END UR AN ABOMINITION TO EVRY JESUS FAN OUT THR. I AHTE YOU, GO BACK TO WRITIG HARRY POTER FANFIC YOU DICK.

JESUS LOVES U!1!1

Wow. I've been blown away. I cannot read your mind with this story! Just when I think I'm familiar with you, you go and fix that. Dang. Especially that last line. "Wow", I will probably say that in reviews to come.