i love the vivid images in the first stanza, especially the part with killing dreams and trashing them. that really spoke to me. wonderful work.

;) yer commas r weird

*crazy, if you will

ha

i was thinking of stopping my review there, but i'll continue for the sake of uhm

eww argh actually just because i like the poem

(except the word kill :p)

anyway i think you really wrote this, style-wise, amazingly well.

all the linebreaks are good, and the sentence-ish structure totally makes the piece.

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