When I saw that you put up Free Fall, I thought it was the one that ENAce wrote. But I can see that it's different haha

This was actually kind of sad :\

And it actually seems like the beginning of a story, not a one-shot. Interesting...

-Katherine

as usual, its fantastic. i absolutely love and completely loath how you leave us so much room for imagination. i love it because its easier to relate and somehow more poetic, mystical when you only give us the present moment. then again, now i desperately want to no about their lives and what happened to them. love it, tragically beautiful and wonderfully horrible.

one of the first stories that doesnt ahve a happy ending, im actually dissapointed. becasue this was beatiful. every time you write a one shot i want to know more about their lives.

How heartbreaking. This was sort of vague but I like these scrabbles that come out of the blue. I liked how you invoked the feelings.

that's heartbreaking

where's he leaving too?

Wow...that was really good! Part of me wishes that I could experience a last good bye, though I know that the pain you described in this story would come alive. I'm so thankful for these stories that I'm finding that I can relate to. I really enjoyed your story...even though it was in present tense. It was absolutely wonderful! Congrats on a great one-shot! I loved it!

much love,

Ebony

sort of vague. but this is like one of those stories you get the urge to write out of the blue, right? the thing about one-shots, it doesn't necessarily have to make sense, since you can just go straight to the point, as you have done.

you got the point across and you've invoked feelings into it! :)

wow, this was so sad.

I just wish I knew ehy they broke up and where he was going.

Other than that, it sad but at the same time it very well written:)

-xxstarryeyedxx

How depressing!

wow. this is exactly wat is happening to me. except we never said goodbye... cause i dont believe it is yet... but i was seriously crying while reading this. someone gets it.

Very moving and sad. I wanted to cry...I felt so bad for her. Why was he leaving? I must know!

Great job! The grammar seemed fine to me.

~Tzotel

Wow, that was...positively beautiful.

~Kicon

I don't understand.. so they broke up? Even though they love each other?

Hm, new story- shiny. : D

I review as I go along, so this might not make too much sense right now. Sorry. ; )

"no matter how true, and no matter how scaling hot." - I'm not positive about this- probably wrong, actually- but I think you mean "scathing" hot. If not, you can just ignore me. : D

"He never gave me a warning before. Now he is, and I don’t know which scenario is better." - Guh. So far my favourite line. I just love it. It makes me smile because it's sad. : )

"We stopped touching each other when we realize that all it does it causes pain." - I love this sentence too, but there are mistakes in it. "Realize" should be "realized", since they don't realize suddenly that it causes pain. And "all it does it causes pain" should be "all it does is cause pain", I think. Or something similar. : )

"if he didn’t leave, if we held on tightly and never let go. I saw him and me. I saw our family. It was perfect, it was right, and it was fated." - I think I should stop copy-and-pasting my favourite parts. I'm so close to copy-and-pasting the whole thing right now. ; P

OKAY! I really liked reading this. : ) You bring the emotions across well. I loved how hopeless they both were, but how they still knew that they could be together. That they knew that they were meant, that it was right, that nothing could stop them.

Basically, I loved this one. : ) It was sad, but so lovely. Thanks for writing and keep up the excellent work! : D

AH! SO SAD! I can't even write a half decent review . . . (