Reviews for child labour
Isca chapter 1 . 8/13/2008
I liked the final section the best; it pulled the whole piece together, and made it that much more honest and angsty.
alicer chapter 1 . 8/10/2008
um so hey! this poem was really intelligent. it was smart. feels like it should be in a magazine somewhere.

packaged,

into adulthood.

really cool line, also.

2 thats how many i didn't count

when i see their tiny

faces sinking in my mind

x2

for the number of bruised hands

x2

and eyes becoming blind.

i liked the way you did the numbers.
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 8/10/2008
it's so good to see poems about real global humanitarian issues.

and you wrote about it beautifully.

the only part i didn't understand was this:

"x2

and eyes becoming blind."

in all likelihood, though, i'm just missing something.

wonderful job.
rust phoenix chapter 1 . 8/10/2008
One of the best poems I have read on the topic. Ever. The imagery is so vivid and fitting. The flow of the words and the word choice builds up the intensity through the poem, like starting with a distant memory and then getting closer to the issue, and whether you planned this correlation or not, it's perfect. I also thought you ended it very effectively.

In response to your last review reply: Nope, I'm still writing. :) Lately I've just been posting things as chapters to a collection.