Reviews for Deep Breaths
likes to headbang chapter 1 . 8/20/2008
"first time flying" i love the duality of that title. literally flying by airplane, or figuratively flying solo without her parents/loved one/whoever's funeral it was (plz send my condolences to her). well done.
Maggie chapter 1 . 8/14/2008
Oh my goodness. It's like looking back through history three years ago. MY first time flying was en route to a funeral. But no one needed to tell me to breathe :) I was nervous until I got on the plane and found it to be a comfortable trip.
R. E. Ellison chapter 1 . 8/14/2008
Beautiful. Both issues come through loud and clear. Can't say much else.
Thoughtful Silence chapter 1 . 8/14/2008
This was good. Something 'bout the second line was just so ominous, which contrasted well with the seemingly encouraging tone of the last. Only thing 'bout this is that the syntax is a bit too much, and detracts from the overall flow.

Anyways, keep up the good work.

- Silence, courtesy of The Roadhouse (link in my profile).