Reviews for darkness
eamane tinuviel chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
interesting subject. the whole dark-things-come-back-to-haunt-you situation is something a lot of people can relate to, mainly because we hope it never has to happen to us.

i like the way you divided up your lines:

"Running and stumbling

Aimlessly about

Chased by your

Wicked and dark past"

it adds suspense to your piece and makes me want to keep reading.

punctuation! don't forget to put in punctuation marks where they are needed:

"Its all around you", "Youre sure", etc.

overall, good piece! :)

*courtesy of The Roadhouse's BEER RUN!

(Beer #14)
Liastoria Alestera chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
That's nice! It makes me think of a dark, haunted house, a dilapidated one that's haunted by guilt:)