Reviews for today i feel like this |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Your idea is pretty common. I can't feel much emotion here that hasn't been beat to death on this site. However, you did use some interesting phrases, which is good because it spiced this up a bit. Some of my favorites: [catch on a web of/fires,] [a swollen herd/of sorrow] ~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile) |
![]() ![]() ![]() "A swollen herd of sorrow." Incredible imagery! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw, that's a horrible way to feel. Love the imagery of smiles catching on a web of fires, though. That's pretty gorgeous. Lovely short piece. Keep writing! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() tomorrow we think unlike anything hope pressed to hearts our tears hop on a train where water, asking around a room with no sickly outcasts, can flow out and be gone already boo i screwed that up trying to opposite you but you're worth the effort hehe :] i like how you worded 'angsty reprimand' my friend told me yesterday in the car on the way to a concert of sorts that fires aren't real even though we could see one and its smoke i'm still thinking that one through also i like the sort-of idea behind the [futility-stamped] smiles being common bugs to be consumed by fires :] everyone else ends their reviews with this, so i guess i will too this time-keep writing! |