|Reviews for today i feel like this|
| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
Your idea is pretty common. I can't feel much emotion here that hasn't been beat to death on this site.
However, you did use some interesting phrases, which is good because it spiced this up a bit. Some of my favorites:
[catch on a web of/fires,]
[a swollen herd/of sorrow]
~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
| Isca chapter 1 . 8/16/2008
"A swollen herd of sorrow." Incredible imagery!
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 8/16/2008
Aw, that's a horrible way to feel. Love the imagery of smiles catching on a web of fires, though. That's pretty gorgeous. Lovely short piece. Keep writing! :)
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 8/16/2008
tomorrow we think unlike anything
pressed to hearts
hop on a train where
water, asking around
a room with no
can flow out and
boo i screwed that up trying to opposite you
but you're worth the effort hehe :]
i like how you worded 'angsty reprimand'
my friend told me yesterday in the car on the way to a concert of sorts that fires aren't real even though we could see one and its smoke
i'm still thinking that one through
also i like the sort-of idea behind the [futility-stamped] smiles being common bugs to be consumed by fires
:] everyone else ends their reviews with this, so i guess i will too this time-keep writing!