Your idea is pretty common. I can't feel much emotion here that hasn't been beat to death on this site.

However, you did use some interesting phrases, which is good because it spiced this up a bit. Some of my favorites:

[catch on a web of/fires,]

[a swollen herd/of sorrow]

~Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)

"A swollen herd of sorrow." Incredible imagery!

Aw, that's a horrible way to feel. Love the imagery of smiles catching on a web of fires, though. That's pretty gorgeous. Lovely short piece. Keep writing! :)

tomorrow we think unlike anything

hope

pressed to hearts

our tears

hop on a train where

water, asking around

a room with no

sickly outcasts,

can flow out and

be gone

already

boo i screwed that up trying to opposite you

but you're worth the effort hehe :]

i like how you worded 'angsty reprimand'

my friend told me yesterday in the car on the way to a concert of sorts that fires aren't real even though we could see one and its smoke

i'm still thinking that one through

also i like the sort-of idea behind the [futility-stamped] smiles being common bugs to be consumed by fires

:] everyone else ends their reviews with this, so i guess i will too this time-keep writing!