Reviews for Please Don't Cry
Jesse the Storyteller chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
I liked the ending, how you put "Don't cry" on its own line, causing it to stand out as the theme of the poem even more.

I don't like how in the line "Please don't cry child, and do not be sad" you used don't and then do not. "Do not" sounded awkward here because the last two places in the poem you had used "don't". Most people say don't, anyway.

I also liked the line "And can you not make the memories stay?" because you put it on equal footing with nature dying as being equally tragic.

-Jesse

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