Reviews for Confession
tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
AWW thats so good!

I just recently started writing poetry for FictionPress and I would love for you to read & review some of my poems.

Feedback from a writer like you would mean the world to me! :)
Jesse the Storyteller chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
Aww! This poem was cute. The repetition makes it work - especially because it brings out the contrast of the last stanza, when they finally get the courage to ask. Your use of "Crash!" "Slam!" etc. as the one-word-line beginning to each stanza was also a neat effect, especially since by putting them on lines by themselves you drew attention to them more. However, I wouldn't've chosen "Crash" to describe butterflies. Maybe "Flip" or something, but not crash. Butterflies are more delicate.

-Jesse

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Phoenix Octavia Bright chapter 1 . 8/16/2008
Like the way you used the thump, tud, crash and slam. It was a different poem then that what I'm used to but that's okay.

PB