|Reviews for plastic baby|
| DanceLikeNo-oneIsWatching chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
nice. the line breaks are sort of hard to deal with, but they have merrit.
| Isca chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
"We could mask the sadness with plastic surgery." Oh my God. What an INCREDIBLE line! I really like the message in this poem, as well. It's a smack in the face for society, and I enjoyed reading this piece :D
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
:) i am pretty sure i immitate the ppl i'd love to be
but i guess most of them are homeless and would hate to know they were being mocked (in all my tomfoolery)
i really dig yr poem here
the line breaks and such are shimsham (i don't know if that word's a compliment really but it sounds rly cool so just go with the flow and assume it's a compliment plz hehe)
i spose it's the last little tidbit yr unsatisfied with
which is a poetic notion all in it's own right i'd posit
but don't delete this one or anything
suggestions that are totally supposed to be ignored:
maybe a line more after the 'soul'
and another glance at the end bit
a comma in line 4 if you want
and/or period or semi-colon line 5
i'd have loved it if you'd have said 'give 1 million big dollars..'
but that might have been jerky