|Reviews for Story of the damned|
| Laxes15 chapter 5 . 8/27/2012
This is really interesting, a great setting for a demon and I know a little more about Hanapu, I'm curious about this Raphael and Gibril too...
| Helen Keller chapter 2 . 8/18/2008
violent and bloody. i love it! i need to know more of what he is lol. it's killing me! :D keep doing a good job.
| Helen Keller chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
pretty good beginning! makes me want to know more. can't wait for updates!
| Alteng chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
This is a good beginning, and the summary got my attention. You have created a good sense of mystery here, and the highlighted part of the flashback was effective.
There is a bit of confusion with the single words since the story is in the third person. The exclamations work better in the first person.
Also, if you mean 'in an excess', the word is 'too' not 'to'..
Still, this is an interesting concept for a story.
| Kexy Knave chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
wicked awesome. Rose-Anna the original name of his mother?
| Counting Petals chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
Review Marathon! (If you're confused, there's a link on my profile.)
You mixed up to/too.
I actually don't like that you told us he killed his mother, because I think you could do a so much better job showing it. You teased us a little, but it wasn't nearly enough, in my opinion.