|Reviews for I Loved Her|
| Silencia chapter 1 . 2/12/2010
Aw... this has great potential to be a longer story y'know you could begin with Flamma and David meeting and such and the reason why David and Alexander became her two sworn enemies, the cause of Davids feelings, how David and Alexander came to know Flamma's secret and also the past of Flamma and Aire. You could even add David's revenge at the ending XD there's alot more to this story, and you know it!
ps: wow... long review...
| rayney chapter 1 . 8/19/2008
I think you might have a good story here. The twist at the end was pretty interesting. Yet, I must admit that a little more detail would be helpful. Things just started to come out a little out of the blue at some parts. Keep on writing!
| Edensong chapter 1 . 8/17/2008
It's good, it drew me in, but I think it'd work really well as a longer story, explaining more about the characters and setting. Build the climax a bit! Keep writing!