Your interpretation of such a classic tale is simply superb. I think that Cinderella's death is a bit abrupt, but understandable. You have written about her hunger for love beautifully.

Very well written and flows nicely, almost rhymes through sections.

I loved it...it was really sad :(

Returning a review (: I loved this. It's done as a Cinderella twist, but I can't help but think you did it in light of something that's happened to yourself? The repeatition of 'I Want You To Know That' is extremely affective & keeps the reader interested. The girl you describe is obviously corrupted, but you can't help but feel sorry for her, and maybe think she wouldn't have been so harsh and wintery if the family had only given her a chance. The piece is well written, and done with a kind of cold bitterness, a matter-of-fact hatred, that makes it irresistable not to like, and sense the emotions behind it. The almost-ending is epic; "We Named Her Something Pretty, But Useless. I Forget The Name, Because We Changed It Shortly Afterwards. She Is Named After You, Now. That Was The Second Thing I Ever Gave You." Great piece, I'll review more later. ;D

This is beautiful and sad.

A combination I happen to adore.

Woot! You reviewed my piece awhile back so I'm here to return the favor! (and to win the Review marathon, a part of the review game; link's in my profile)

Anyway! I love this alternative perspective of Cinderella. It is a clever new way to see the fairytale. Over the years ppl have taken the time to rethink the villains (the play Wicked comes to mind) but never really to look at the supposed heroes.

I also liked the repeated line "I wanted you to know that." It punctuated the piece. Good job!

Did i mention the Review marathon? and the review game? and the link in my profile?

Nicki :P

I think the words "this is just really good" sums it all up! There are so many parts to this story that I enjoy so much that it's difficult to say which is my favroite. However, I enjoy the part where you say "You flew out of the parlor [...] It read, 'I want.' in your clumsy penmanship, black ink splattered across the page" and onward to the end of the story.

Most of all, though, the ending has a nice twist. The summary made me laugh, and yet-while I was reading-some bits of your story made me feel a tad sympathetic for her (such as when you say, "You wished that Mum loved you," etc.). Anyway, it's a good one-shot overall.

And thank you for the review on my poem, by the way :)

~Happy writing!

J.V.

o.o Very interesting to be sure. Lovely work.

~Unknown Survivor

I don't think I've ever seen this format (as opposed to a linear story line) in a fairy tale retelling, and I like it a lot. The emotions are real, the characters are vivid, the relationship between siblings is perfectly described. All of this in less than a thousand words. This is the sort of thing I can only wish I could write. Nice work.

I love this take on the fairy tale because it shows everything in a different perspective, a much more creepy light as compared to the common cliche of "poor, tortured girl triumphs in the end". You're such a master with words.

As i read this I felt the hatred rubbing off on me, The fact you was able to activate the readers senses and capture them in emotions, was good. I really felt sorry for the sister, but at the end it kind of made me feel a little bit better.

You have a beautiful way of writing.

Very good.

I was drawn in from the first word to the last.

I was guessing Cinderella. YAY! This was pretty good. The ending of a fairytale. That sounds fun to do. All fairytales end with they lived happily ever after. I like that idea...

Great job!

So your reviews intrigued me, and I decided to check out your stories. 'Ella' caught my eye because of the summary. I laughed, because I thought it was funny. Lol...

So it wasn't that funny. It was actually kind of creepy. I guess that's what you were going for. I wanted to leave you a good review like you do for me, but I really don't know what to say. I liked it in a weird, morbid kind of a sense. Very different from your usual "Cinderella is the victim" thing. I liked that about it.

I feel like it'd be hard for the narrator to feel JUST hatred. I feel like she would be confused at the very least. That's really the only thing I can add.

I liked that you kept adding "I just want you to know." It was a good use of repetition.

Sorry for the craptastic review... lol, I guess I'm not as deep as I thought. Haha. :)

Holy moly. Why is this so much creepier than I remember it being the first time around? Did you do something different to it? Wow... how... morbid... None of this is said in a sad way, I hope you know. I do enjoy some creepiness every once in a while, but I really remembered this all wrong, I guess. Wow. You are good at throwing me off and giving me things that I do not expect.

Blue eyes are creepy. Brown eyes are awesome. Just sayin'. Haha, I'm actually kidding though!