|Reviews for subtle|
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 8/21/2008
Ha, yeah, I like it. If we were like this, we probably wouldn't be writing. The best writing comes from misery. It really does. Which is why so many successful writers end up having serious problems (alcoholism, drug addiction, etc.). But that's not the point. This is true and beautifully worded, especially the beginning. Nice work. Keep writing! :)
| SEMMU chapter 1 . 8/20/2008
I like your sentiments.
Here's a little constructive help. Would you consider replacing "bitch about" with regret. The little bit of alliteration, in my sick and twisted mind, would tie the whole poem together and enhance flow by connecting the words "sweat" and "regret". However, the piece stands fine on its own.
| Isca chapter 1 . 8/20/2008
"Grow wings when no one's watching and swerve our dreams in the right direction." Excellent line! I liked the angst in this poem.