i still luv ur style of writing- its great but i'm not sure how a girl can love a man who RAPED her, however much you gloss over the words.

However I still love the stry and if this rape scene is leading somewhere- then i'm willing to sit it out and pass judgement at the end.

x

Keep writing! :D

So, last chapter, I wasn't gung-ho about the rape scene at all. But now, sitting back and reading this (well written) chapter, I've realized it works for the story. And I'm glad you're not the type of author to just make the demons all nice and fuzzy and have them fall in love instantly and blah blah blah. You've added conflict. Good job. And good job for sticking to your guns even though quite a few people didn't like what you wrote :) The most important part of being an author (in my opinion) is that the author themselves like what they've written. That's all that matters. Keep it up and update soon :)

Faith

I'm still not pleased. I understand the reason why now, but it doesn't excuse anything. And I would not have known that Alma did not forgive Illias if it wasn't for your author's note. All of her actions screamed forgiveness, especially at the end when she wanted him to come to bed with her. I was wondering when all the psychology she was learning would kick in. Stockholm Syndrome is clearly a problem here.

You said Illias wasn't protrayed as a good guy and Alma wasn't a classic heroine. I have to disagree with that. A lot. At the beginning the Illias we knew was charming, handsome, a white knight. He came out of nowhere, a god, to rescue Alma. There was never hints that, while he may be a demon, he was actually a jerk too. Then we get to the house and it is a whole new man. It was confusing and a turn off.

As for Alma... she was never as strong as a classical heroine but she was one. She offered to sacrifice her life at the beach right? And when she was arguing with herself in the shower, saying that she used to be strong- what happened? No. No, no no. It is disconcerting for the reader. At first she is normal, then she is wonder woman, then she is a pathetic weakling and then, out of the blue, it turns out she has all the mental/emotional issues.

It doesn't make sense. The development is confusing.

This may be more harsh then I meant it. I stand by my message, even if my word choice was inconsiderate.

Well, I sort of guessed right. About the reason why he raped her in all. I'm glad they talked it all out, they needed to. And hopefully from here on they will be closer to one another. I still really want them to be together in the end. lol. And it does seem like she's become really relied on him. Anyway, nice chapter. It really helps you understand both Illias and Alma. Update soon.

-tawnymarie

Well...so I guess now he thinks he's gonna be gettin some everytime he sleeps next to her? Can't wait to read the next chapter and find out.

I loved this chapter ]. Everything about it seemed right and in place. I'm glad that you decided to write about his reason at this point and not later on. It didn't feel rushed or anything, it felt like this chapter was just what was needed after the previous one. That last sentence was a wonderful way to end the chapter ], I can't wait to read the next one.

great chapter. i think the action with ser is ready to start soon..

great chapter and woot stuff is out in the open and such lol 2 the last line i wonder what shes gonna say to that

Yes, I can agree with you there. Simply seducing her would have been too typical, too expected. I'm glad you wrote it out like this. If it's any consolation, when you wrote the scene, I didn't define it as 'rape' in my head. It just was what it was. And I can appreciate how you wrote it, and the characters reactions to it. I feel like they were very much in character before, during, and after that scene. I just hope that their romantic relationship, not just physical, still has a chance to flourish after this.

As always,

I remain your loyal reader,

Serai Rhifune

I think this was a good follow up chapter. It helped explain what happened and why, and he actually seemed a little sorry for what he did. Not to mention it seems like he is going to be nicer now...

Ho-ma-god. I have read this non-stop and I have one...no...two things to say:

1. JESUS CHRIST YOU'RE AN AMAZING WRITER.

2. Post. And fast.

Adios!

hi there.. started reading your fic just today so while I would have wanted to leave a review with each chapter I got caught up with your story and thus forgot to comment. So I'm redeeming myself with this. I love your story. Not only is it refreshing to read something that is not vampire and werewolves-centered (I'm a big fan of these stories mind you..) but it is nice for a change. You write well, I hardly seen any grammatical errors, at least tense-wise.

I love that Alma finally admitted what's bothering her and voiced it out on Ilias. I mean a girl could only take so much drama and not spontaneously combust. Can't really blame the girl for experiencing cabin fever. If all the things that hold dear to my heart were abruptly taken away from me I would be going a little nuts too.

On that note, I bid you good day and good luck with the future fics. I'm looking forward to reading more. (",x)

Wow. A really awesome story. I like it a lot. Please update this soon, I can't wait to see what happens next!

I remain your loyal reader,

Serai Rhifune

I just spent all day pretty much reading this and I have to say, it was worth it. This story is not only creative but it's written amazingly. You really are a great writer. I have to say this chapter was so sad! And I'm absolutely livid towards Illias at the moment. Rape? How could he? After I read it I took a moment to try and understand why he'd resort to it. It seemed that first there was the head that may have triggered it. Then there's the fact that he's feeling something toward her (possibly love? or at least strong like) maybe both of those played into him feeling that he needed to get his seed into her (even if it was resorting into such extreme measures). I don't know, there's other stuff that could be the reason. And if I really thought about it I'm sure I could come up with it. Hopefully whatever his reason is, it's at least a plausible (sort of) excuse. Cause then I might hate him if it's not :( anyway, please please update soon! And please have them make up! I want them to be together...

oh my gosh, what a dramatic chapter! this story kind of perfects the love-hate thing. I'll be interested to see what you do with the sex scene in this chapter as the story continues... in other words, will the two of them forget about it or will it be brought up again?

the end of this chapter was especially lovely. the two last paragraphs are really good. well done!

and I'm glad she told him off.