Reviews for Lucy
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
Much like your Sophie piece you show a lot of intricises and edges of a person without giving themselves away completely, which I like, it adds a strong mystery to the piece. I think the Sophie piece was stronger in this regard, however, only because I feel like it shows the portrait of it’s subject stronger.

Although this one is much more broader then the Sophie piece as well.

Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)
maxineuhmarie chapter 1 . 5/27/2009
this just made me smile this huge smile - i love it so much! and the tattoo cracked me up.

and i feel like i know a few people who remind me of this - "Lucy reads like she's making excuses"
Jesse the Storyteller chapter 1 . 12/27/2008
I'm not sure, but I think "over imposing" needs a hyphen in between those words. Sorry to nitpick.

The last line of this is sweet in a funny kind of way. I like it a lot.

"Lucy reads, and Lucy trembles. / ... Lucy reads like she's making excuses" I like these lines a lot. They are nice details and are cleverly worded.

"I hope someone loves Lucy" I think this line is kind of sloppy - it's a little too spelling everything out for a poem.


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she smolders chapter 1 . 9/9/2008
I really love what you call your 'people poetry'. After reading this, I feel like I know Lucy and now I want to see her smile too. Take care.
perdita chapter 1 . 9/9/2008
so i've missed our fictionpress friendship camaraderie thing we had


like a couple years ago or something?

and i've missed your writing a LOT

stay beautiful
Isca chapter 1 . 8/29/2008
I liked the constant repetition of the word 'Lucy' and the imagery of her daily life, appearance, values, etc. You have a very unique writing style; your words are simple, but full of emotion. :)
katt kelsibones chapter 1 . 8/23/2008
this is so incredibly beautiful ]

amazing work!

sharks don't sleep chapter 1 . 8/23/2008
Ah! This is going in my favorites. :D

I absolutely love "but I can feel her bones waver" and "Lucy reads like she's making excuses."

I love the style of this; just the way Lucy is described in, I don't know, the way you would normally describe someone in the first stanza and then how you branch out and talk about how she reads a certain way in the next really kind of brings this person to life.

And the ending is brilliant for this.