| Reviews for He's Hers |
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   Wallflower.x chapter 37 . 1/16/2012 Please update soon |
| Lynn-Night chapter 38 . 12/26/2009 Update soon! |
| close enough to speak chapter 38 . 11/18/2009 Ouch. James was pretty harsh. Luckily Bee is a cold hard bitch so it doesn't matter. Couple of typos - shuddered, not shuttered. And of course your usual debacle of commas instead of periods at the end of dialogue. Generally much cleaner though... at least in the grammatical sense ;) Reading this is like meeting an old friend. I hope this means you'll be back for more! |
| iluvodie chapter 38 . 11/18/2009 way to go james FINALLY kicking her out! lol. cant wait to read more :D |
| Lynn-Night chapter 37 . 6/1/2009 Wow! That is crazy intense! Please get Polly and James together! They'd be such a cutee couple! |
| close enough to speak chapter 37 . 5/23/2009 Wo-o-ow James! Smoking! Ridden with typos and rambles and sentence fragments that you should really go back and fix (because clarity in this situation would be dee-lightful, m) but it gets the job done. Yummers! When I first read this I thought that he said Brittany, which was awkward and funny; but this way is much better, same bad pre-emptive situation but without the cliche. Way to be Polly! and way to be James... "pulled himself above her", m... |
| Lynn-Night chapter 36 . 5/19/2009 Cute! Good job! Update soon! |
| close enough to speak chapter 36 . 5/17/2009 Fantastic closing line except that you misspelled the word "be". Your exits tend to be really clever. I like that Shawn doesn't try to catch the phone. Nice interaction with the 3 of them too, very comfortable and we've-done-this-before. |
| close enough to speak chapter 35 . 5/16/2009 This was better. Congrats on Man-U! Way to win big! |
| close enough to speak chapter 34 . 5/15/2009 Huh. Well... I agree with Shawn and Ryan, but it's kind of a repeat of other James-and-Bee's-fucked-up-relationship moments. Also the grammar in the first two lines is appalling. I guess I just feel that all of this has been said before. Although maybe that's the idea? I do like the last line. |
| Kimberlli chapter 34 . 5/15/2009 I believe James's a misguided child. But he will find his path.. hopefully ) Ok, so that was my comment for the day!(: ~ Kim! |
| Lynn-Night chapter 34 . 5/15/2009 Good job! Update soon! And don't worry too much about the language...most people that read these stories are teens...and I'm sure they couldn't care less! Haha! |
| Lynn-Night chapter 33 . 5/12/2009 Awee cute! Love it so far! |
| close enough to speak chapter 33 . 5/12/2009 Oh m ah. So pleased with everyone! and glad that they've all met and will be able to function as a group. Nice of you to skip the introductions too, that's always awkward or cheesy - likely the latter, since Shawn is never awkward :) I really really like Allison's car and Shawn, and James holding Poppy's hand, and his flirty but slow-paced explanation. Bravo on him not snogging her senseless or anything, this way feels much more... meaningful, or whatever. There is a typo in here somewhere but I can't for the life of me find it. There are also lots of misuses of quotations i.e. putting commas at the end of a quote no matter what, even when the next thing is a new sentence. In general though your use of paragraphs is actually fantastic. The pacing of this is really good. Definitely a top 5 chapter! |
| Lynn-Night chapter 32 . 4/15/2009 Hm good job! Update soon! Love it so far! |