|Reviews for Commence|
| Shoob chapter 7 . 2/11/2009
Now there's a creepy cliffhanger if I've ever seen one!
| Shoob chapter 6 . 1/22/2009
It's back! I was starting to wonder.
Nice bit of introspect for Laurel here. This isn't normally the style of literature that I prefer, but something about your writing keeps my attention. I think it's the way you describe Laurel's thoughts, she just seems, well, real. And interesting.
Good work, keep it up.
| Shoob chapter 5 . 12/6/2008
Very nice. The flashbacks on the jog were good, but the best part of writing I saw was Laurel confronting Scott and her reaction. I might be wrong, but I get the feeling that this chapter, along with chapter four, is transitioning from exposition to the main plot, the "action." Keep it up.
| Wynterra chapter 4 . 10/18/2008
Excellent story line so far. The time jump between the frst and second chapters was confusing, especially since the time jump wasn't specified until a little later.