I love this story so far!

It's very beautiful.

I hope Mey finds happiness soon!

Oh wow, I sort of love this. I happened across it, and as soon as I read the very summary, I thought, "Yes."

I love your characters. Mey is driving me crazy - say something to him, you little fool! - but endearingly so; I really sympathise with her, stuck alone with that grim brute of a husband. That said, I like Norsarion, and the fact that he's two-dimensional with both an inner being and an external facade, rather than a flat character who only has one side to his personality. The memories of how awkward they were when they first met were just adorable. I'm looking forward to seeing them develop.

I also like your flowery language. It could get a bit overwhelming for other readers, I'm sure, but to me it provides a nicely stilted, mannered narrative voice that meshes well with the characters' interior thoughts.

This is a beautiful beginning. Please continue.

In reply to your author's note:

Oh, sweet! I always hate it when authors announce in their summaries "this contains slash" like it's the only worthwhile aspect of the plot. So it's cool to see that even though it's a part of your fiction, you're not using it to advertise.

Anyway, I like your style. It's verbose, but still modest and easy to read. Nosarion is super cool, and I want to know his secret. Mey is pretty okay, for starting characteristics, but I'm definitely looking forward to her development; she's a little annoying right now.

My God. I hope you don't mind if I say I lol'd at the part where Mey and Norsa started to talk. It's adorable, but it's also hilarious! They're both so hapless and so stuttery all over themselves!

BUT that was a beautiful piece of showing everyone exactly the difference between them. Poor Mey. Just give her a bit of kindness and she falls in love. And poor Norsa, so dutiful and kind. I mean, if that had been me, I would be considerably less patient. (I experienced the same thing with this geeky dude back in high school. I was nice to him that one time, and he started talking about it to everyone! The teasing was beyond merciless and I dropped him like a hot potato. Lor, I'm awful.)

Also, I love your choice of point of view. Switching immediately to Norsa's in the second chapter keeps the interaction fresh and prevents us from forming a jaundiced view of him. Will you be alternating PoV's from now on (like his and hers) or will you use more points of view? Mey's sisters sound a bit flat, and we don't hear much about the parents and relatives and friends as of yet. (Neither Mey nor Norsa seem to have friends, I'm thinking.) But I'm sure there will be broadening and more mentionings later! (And here's to hoping L-, when he finally appears, gets his own PoV too. D )

And that last part... Where Norsa hopes that Mey will just get a lover but also not...? I like that. But I guess there's no use hoping Mey (why do I keep calling her Nessy in my mind?) would really get one, though...

I really like the idea of your story and I think the characters are very whimsical and original. I absolutely love the quote you chose for this story and the title is very cute (:

A couple things that I personally think should be revised a little is, first off, the beginning. It doesn't completely draw me in or give me an envision of what happened, especially in the second and third paragraph. Also, you never really explained what a Dell was? I might have accidentally skipped over it or something, but I still don't know what it is . All the fancy words in the beginning makes it hard for people to understand without pulling out their dictionary, also.

As I kept reading, though, I really loved the characters and the idea of the story so far is very good (: Kudos!

Aww, I just want to huggle poor Mey. I think she's adorable. I also really like Norsarion and his awkwardness as well. I feel rather badly for the both of them. Unrequited love is terrible.

Continue please. I love this story despite its lack of action.

*comes up from nowhere to glomp you with extreme vehemence* YOU POSTED IT! Omg, I can't believe you finally did it.

Mey is such a darling-puss. Her angstiness and flightiness are just on this side of annoying, but that makes her even more adorable to me. Also, I find it amazing how you handle PoV. Norsa is recognizably himself here, but the treatment is so very different from when we're looking at him from, say, L-'s point of view. You really do get into the characters' heads.

And that marriage ceremony? L-O-V-E. The whole mirror thing just exploded my mind, man. The mental image was amazing. I kept seeing Mey in her green dress (the one you drew her in as a chibi) and Norsa looking all knightly and righteous, but oh-so-depressed.

I can't wait for you-know-who to come into the picture!

Maybe I'll put in some more constructive critique later, when I have more time... But for now... *gives the story so much love*

I commend you on an excellent vocabulary, but I have one suggestion - try to tone down the flowery language. I understand you may be aiming for a 'Victorian' tone, but your piece would be so much easier to read if you stuck with Subject-Verb-Object sentences and cut back on adverbs.