Reviews for Opposites Attract |
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![]() ![]() ![]() :3 YAY! you took it on! cant wait to start reading them |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is actually a feedback on your entire story, I read it all in one go so I got a good picture of 'Opposites Attract'. My opinion is going to be expressed in away that may help you with future writing so please don't be offended. 1-Your title really dosen't fit in with your story, it's a good title but Lynny and Daniel aren't that different. They're actually quite alike. 2-You really need to watch your spelling and grammer. It got better as your story progressed but there was still some obvious mistakes. I noticed you said that you didn't read over your story, you NEED to do this. It should cut out the mistakes and make you more aware of what your writing. 3-I don't like when author's over discribe places or things, which you didn't but you also didn't describe things or places very well. You should, maybe, just describe what the people look like, weather the dance school was an old or new building stuff like that. Other than these few things your story was very good, it kept you guessing to a certain extent. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whoops, accidentally added this to my favorites, but it's got a good background. The only thing I had a problem with was the constant change of POVs, at least, it seemed like it. Wait, scratch that, reading some of it over and it is definitely a POV change. Or looks like one. So, um, if you can, fix it, please? Other than that, there are a few punctuation and grammar mistakes, but nothing too major. |
![]() ![]() ![]() omg this was so sweet |
![]() ![]() ![]() this was a really good story :) i like the idea of re-doing the story because i read the whole thing through today for the first time and noticed a few things that could be clearer. just as some constructive criticism i think near the beginning it isn't clear what type of dance it is. if it's ballroom (guessing from the tango)then maybe you could just add that in. since i do dance i know many other styles as well so that may be why i was a bit confused about the ballet/ ballroom styled clothing and dance. besides from that i think the story was very good. it reminds me of the movie 'step up' which is like one of my fave movies! hahahahahaha :) i would love to read your story when it has been re-done so good luck :) x mels |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was an awesome story. Many congratulations. ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow... This is a really great story!Looking forward to reaing the rest! |
![]() ![]() ![]() whys he going...wait was he accepted?it would be heartbraking if he didnt go oh i cant wait! for a ll the trouble Lol nice ending |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw! They both got in! That's just so adorable. :) I really liked this story overall, though I don't think this last chapter did the story the justice it deserved, because it was a bit awkward. However, I'm happy they did end up together. They're so perfect for each other! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() YAY! I'm upset it's ending, don't get me wrong, but I do love this ending, it makes me so happy! I think you need to just read through this though and fix the little mistakes that are here and there and it'll be perfect. Great job! -Grace |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was an awesome story and I'm looking forward to a sequel! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sad to see it's almost over... but I love it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think it's really cute, especially the part with Ryden and Pierre :) I think it's great that she won second and I can exactly imagine the tone that both characters use, which is good, seeing as they are very realistic :) Is it over? I hope it isn't over! -Grace |
![]() ![]() ![]() updsteness XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think it's really unrealistic that she taught the dance to him the day they were performing. I dance, and that would never, ever work, especially if the guy hasn't had formal training. |